Talk:Muchachos bañándose en la laguna de Maracaibo/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 17:34, 30 March 2020 (UTC)

Going to review this article. MWright96 (talk) 17:34, 30 March 2020 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Lead

 * "it has not seen as much modern discussion as that film." - the latter

Content

 * "on disc 3.[2]:66, 91-2." - the extra period is redundant
 * "The first is a reconstructed shot of kids jumping into the lake," - children

Screening

 * "Less than six months after the first Vitascope had been brought to Venezuela, Venezuelan film" - try not to have a similarly word to follow another
 * "at exactly 7:00 pm[2]:9 with the screening of two films produced in the country" - a comma is missing between "p.m." and the number of the reference
 * "were shown at the same time." - how about simultaneously instead?
 * Please say briefly who Rodolfo Izaguirre is

Production and identity of director

 * "For many years, sources suggested that it was either Trujillo, or Trujillo" - close repetition of the word "Trujillo"
 * "Those who feel he could be the director rely on Trujillo's proximity to film" - try to reword this sentence with the mention of Trujillo's surname earlier
 * "Alexis Fernández, film scholar and lecturer, and a biographer of Trujillo[16]" - a comma is missing after the word "Trujillo" and the reference number
 * Please briefly state who Jesús Ángel Semprún Parra and Luis Guillermo Hernández are

Modern critical views

 * "there were typically either government-focused films or tourism films" - close repetition of the word "films"
 * "She proposes that being a frontrunner of the industry was cause for the government to take over the industry" - try to avoid repetition of the word "industry" in the same sentence