Talk:Muhammad I of Granada/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Gog the Mild (talk · contribs) 09:20, 25 May 2018 (UTC)

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Discussion
I plan to start this in two or three days. Gog the Mild (talk) 09:23, 25 May 2018 (UTC)

References.
 * Several books are missing publisher locations.
 * Updated. HaEr48 (talk) 06:25, 30 May 2018 (UTC)


 * A few are missing ISBNs. HaEr48 (talk) 06:25, 30 May 2018 (UTC)
 * Updated. The remaining ones are papers, not books, so they don't have ISBN.


 * Optional. Single page references should ideally be p., not pp.; multi-page references pp., not p.
 * Fixed p vs pp. HaEr48 (talk) 06:25, 30 May 2018 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review. Let me know if there's more I can do. 06:25, 30 May 2018 (UTC)


 * Hi . No problem, I have been eying this since you nominated it but have been struggling for time. I didn't ping you as these were my initial thoughts prior to actually reading the article. (Which I hope to start, or even finish, tomorrow.) It seems in good shape and I don't foresee problems. Thanks for remedying them so quickly. Gog the Mild (talk) 10:04, 30 May 2018 (UTC)

Prose
 * I have made a few small copy edits; revert anything you don't like.
 * Thank you. All of them looks good to me, except that I don't understand why you modified "His religious views appeared" to now say appear. Shouldn't it be in past tense? HaEr48 (talk) 05:19, 1 June 2018 (UTC)
 * You are quite right. I meant to change it to "His religious views appear to have transformed during his career." but relooking at it I don't see why I needed to change it. Reverted.


 * "Ibn Hud". It is usual to give names in full on first mention.
 * Done. HaEr48 (talk) 05:19, 1 June 2018 (UTC)


 * I think that Alcazaba should be in italics, with a bracketed translation.
 * Done. HaEr48 (talk) 05:19, 1 June 2018 (UTC)


 * Optional: "During his rulership, Muhammad placed loyal men in castles and cities". "Rulership" seems a little clunky to me.
 * Changed to "rule". HaEr48 (talk) 05:19, 1 June 2018 (UTC)


 * "the Banu Ashqilula". Sometimes you use the definite article and sometimes you don't. This should be consistent. (IMO it should be used.)
 * Added the to everything


 * "The Banu Ashqilula agreed to negotiate under the mediation of Al-Tahurti from Morocco. Before these efforts bore fruit, Muhammad suffered fatal injuries after falling from a horse on 22 January 1273. He was succeeded by his son and designated successor Muhammad II." It would be useful to know the outcome of the negotiations.
 * I tried to briefly describe the short-term resolution of this conflict here. Does that make sense?
 * That makes perfect sense. It just seemed to leave a loose thread from a readers point of view. Now tied up.


 * Initially the occasional date is given parenthetically in the Islamic calendar, which I think is a very appropriate idea. This stops in 1238 (365). I think that a couple of further 'translations' would be helpful.
 * I added another one for death. But sources don't always give the Islamic calendar year for many events, especially the minor ones. An Islamic year does not begin or end at the same time as the solar year, and is a bit shorter, so there's no one-to-one mapping. I think it's okay to only have it for major events, as we do now. What do you think? HaEr48 (talk) 05:19, 1 June 2018 (UTC)
 * Just what I was trying, poorly, to communicate. That looks good.

A fine article and interesting to read. Could you take a look at the points above and let me know what you think. Gog the Mild (talk) 11:19, 31 May 2018 (UTC)
 * Thanks for your feedback, copyediting and suggestion. Let me know if you have more feedback. HaEr48 (talk) 05:19, 1 June 2018 (UTC)