Talk:Muhammad Taqi Amini/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: AhmadLX (talk · contribs) 17:33, 22 May 2020 (UTC)

Thank you for your efforts in improving Wikipedia. The article, however, does not meet the criteria yet. Please go carefully through the criteria, and also have a look at WP:RS. My main concern is broadness. It is just above 300 words and excluding the lead and books, it is 240 words long. A subject on which a doctoral thesis has been written, as the article claims, must have more than just that.

Other issues:


 * Per the cited source, Hijri birth-year is 1324 and not 1344.
 * What is meant by "he was not able to stay at a single place"? And why is it important?
 * Please avoid one-line paras.
 * "He was the former dean of..." When it is already "was", why do you need "former"
 * "His book Fiqh Islami ka Tarakhi Pas Manzar is a required reading ..." This is WP:OR, because it is not supported by an independent reliable source but is taken directly from the university syllabus.
 * "...and mainly taught books of Hadith." → "and taught Hadith."
 * [1] doesn't seem to confirm that "Professor" and "Mawlāna" were his "titles".
 * "He studied his primary classes..." → "He acquired his primary education..."
 * [1], [5], [6] do not qualify as objective, independent sources and are riddled with puffery.
 * "He completed his studies under Kifayatullah Dihlawi at Madrasa Aminia" What was the degree he acquired? And in what year?
 * When did he start teaching at Madrasa Subhania Delhi and what did he teach?
 * "...to serve Darul Uloom Muinia as a Principal "?
 * "The Vice Chancellor of the AMU, Sayyid Hashim Ali extended his post up to 1989." Rephrase and merge with the previous sentence.

The article requires significant expansion and prose improvement. It cannot be promoted to GA at the moment and is a Quick Fail. Regards. AhmadLX-(Wikiposta ) 18:36, 22 May 2020 (UTC)