Talk:Mulhim Ma'n/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 21:26, 9 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments
 * "their grip over" control? Bit more neutral tone.
 * Revised. Al Ameer (talk) 16:32, 10 September 2021 (UTC)


 * "in 1636. In 1657" repetitive.
 * 1636 was an error actually, removed. Al Ameer (talk) 16:32, 10 September 2021 (UTC)


 * "tax farmer" what's one of those?
 * I could tell you it's not of the Ol' MacDonald variety. Should I explain this a bit in the lead or the term's first mention in the body?


 * "of the Chouf who" if you're not saying Chouf region, shouldn't this just be "of Chouf who"?
 * In the sources it is always introduced as "the Shuf" or "the Chouf". Similar to "the Galilee" or "the Rockys". Al Ameer (talk) 16:32, 10 September 2021 (UTC)


 * "Grand Duke of Tuscany" is there a link for this?
 * Thought that the linking of Grand Duchy of Tuscany would suffice, but linked the title Grand Duke of Tuscany anyway. Al Ameer (talk) 16:32, 10 September 2021 (UTC)


 * "southern Beqaa Valley was" overlinked.
 * Fixed. Al Ameer (talk) 16:32, 10 September 2021 (UTC)


 * "a one year term' one-year.
 * Fixed. Al Ameer (talk) 16:32, 10 September 2021 (UTC)


 * "governor of Tripoli.[17]" tripoli overlnked.
 * Fixed. Al Ameer (talk) 16:32, 10 September 2021 (UTC)


 * "taxes in Keserwan, the" overlinked.
 * Fixed. Al Ameer (talk) 16:32, 10 September 2021 (UTC)


 * "of Safed, which" overlinked.
 * Fixed. Al Ameer (talk) 16:32, 10 September 2021 (UTC)


 * "and the Shia Muslim Hamade" overlinked.
 * Fixed. Al Ameer (talk) 16:32, 10 September 2021 (UTC)


 * "later succeeded Bashir" unreferenced.
 * First biblio entry needs an en-dash in the year range.
 * Fixed. Al Ameer (talk) 16:32, 10 September 2021 (UTC)


 * As does Olsaretti.
 * Fixed. Al Ameer (talk) 16:32, 10 September 2021 (UTC)

That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 08:56, 10 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks . Almost finished. Need to add that citation for Bashir's succession. Otherwise, just let me know about the tax farm explanation. Al Ameer (talk) 16:32, 10 September 2021 (UTC)
 * I think tax farmer needs a footnote, referenced of course, to explain to people like me who haven't got a clue! The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 10:12, 12 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Done! Al Ameer (talk) 04:18, 13 September 2021 (UTC)