Talk:Music House Museum/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 19:50, 21 May 2020 (UTC)

Will be reviewing this article as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 19:50, 21 May 2020 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Background history

 * "David Stiffler (an architect) and Dean Junker (a mechanical engineer)" - reword this portion of text without using parentheses
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:06, 22 May 2020 (UTC)


 * "started a hobby in the 1970s of collecting and restoring antique musical instruments." - began a hobby of collecting and restoring antique musical instruments in the 1970s.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:06, 22 May 2020 (UTC)


 * "as a venture for the collecting, restoring and displaying of antique musical instruments." - how about collection, restoration and display
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:06, 22 May 2020 (UTC)


 * "In 1979, they decided to create a formal display to show off their hobby to friends and others." - for friends and others to see their collection.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:06, 22 May 2020 (UTC)


 * "in the summer of 1983." - try not to use seasons per MOS:SEASON
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:28, 22 May 2020 (UTC)


 * "in the fall of 1983." - same issue as above
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:28, 22 May 2020 (UTC)


 * "It eventually opened in May 1984 to the general public" - to the general public in May 1984 might be better
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:28, 22 May 2020 (UTC)


 * "Work was then started in remodeling the 12,000 square-foot" - use the convert template on the text in bold
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:28, 22 May 2020 (UTC)


 * "The granary originally was where the farm’s workers lived and slept. They called the granary the old farmhouse, from which the music museum received its "house" name." - think these two sentences can be made into one and shortened accordingly
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:28, 22 May 2020 (UTC)

Current museum

 * Theatre organ doesn't need to begin with a capital letter
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:35, 22 May 2020 (UTC)


 * "that is thirty feet wide and eighteen feet high." - use the convert template in the words in bold
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:35, 22 May 2020 (UTC)