Talk:Music for Cars/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Wetrorave (talk · contribs) 15:02, 18 June 2021 (UTC)

Article looks pretty good. This is how a quick look at it looks like:

I'll be reviewing this while I listen to the album itself, since I'm really into anything ambient after... well, y'know, this extremely haunting work of art

Lead and infobox

 * "by English band" > "by English pop rock band"
 * The 1975 articles generally avoid including a musical label beside the "band" part. Their music is pretty much evenly split between pop, rock, R&B, and electronic.  Gia co bbe  talk 19:13, 19 June 2021 (UTC)


 * "the 1975. It was released" > "the 1975, released" ✅
 * "the rest of the EP" > "the other tracks of the EP" ✅
 * Wikilink concept to concept album ✅
 * "in Healy's bedroom" - this sentence may be confusing to those that are not familiar with who Matthew Healy is (including myself); perhaps change to "in the bedroom of singer Matthew Healy"? ✅
 * "from contemporary music critics. Praise was given to the EP's" > "from music critics, who praised the EP's" ✅

Background and development

 * Apparently only ref 2 supports the two first statements, whereas ref 1 supports neither of them
 * The SOS ref is used to back up everything in the statement, minus the "January" bit, which is supported by the Guardian ref.  Gia co bbe  talk 18:47, 19 June 2021 (UTC)


 * Wikilink record labels to record label ✅
 * "In August of the same year" - of what year? ✅
 * "told Some Kind of Awesome" > "told to magazine Some Kind of Awesome" ✅

Composition

 * "format"; asserting that with the" > "format"; with the ✅
 * "[10][14][15][16]" - this is citation overkill, remove the one you find least reliable
 * "[10][12][21][22]" - overkill II
 * For the above two points; each ref contains a different piece of info for the sentence, unfortunately, British English omits the last comma in a list, which leads to bundling of sources at the end of the sentence. I've moved the refs where I could to directly after the info they support.  Gia co bbe  talk 18:55, 19 June 2021 (UTC)
 * Wait a minute. British English doesn't omit the last comma in a list (and even if it did, there is no mention of it at MOS:SERIAL). This British English article I'm working in always uses the "serial comma" or "Oxford comma". The style you seem to be going for is no use of this comma, which is ok. What matters is for it to be a consistent thing for the entirety of the article. Wetrorave (talk) 00:33, 21 June 2021 (UTC)

Release and reception

 * "She commented that "Chocolate" was the record's "obvious main attraction", she found the remaining four songs more" > "The writer commented that, while "Chocolate" was the record's "obvious main attraction", the remaining four songs are more" ✅
 * Why the 'while' at "while commending" ✅
 * "the EP along" > "the EP, along" ✅

Promotion

 * Nice

Track listing

 * Change the  parameter from "Music for Cars" to "Music for Cars track listing"

Personnel

 * Do not wikilink to guitar, piano, vocals, or record producer, which are "common instruments" per WP Albums recommendation ✅

Overall

 * until all points are corrected; it's very close to GA though, so congrats for your work. Wetrorave (talk) 15:02, 18 June 2021 (UTC)
 * Thank you for the speedy review I believe I've incorporated/addressed all of your comments. Let me know  if there's anything I've missed!  Gia co bbe  talk 19:19, 19 June 2021 (UTC)
 * I have certainly not speedily responded but this wasn't a problem. Today, the article ✅es.


 * And yeah, the least I can do for others is a speedy review. Wetrorave (talk) 00:22, 21 June 2021 (UTC)