Talk:Music of Final Fantasy XVI/GA1

GA Review
The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.''

Reviewer: Rhain (talk · contribs) 23:15, 21 January 2024 (UTC)

I'll take this one! Based on your previous work, I assume this won't take long. Expect a review shortly. – Rhain  ☔ (he/him) 23:15, 21 January 2024 (UTC)

Lead

 * Takafumi Imamura, Daiki Ishikawa, Saya Yasaki, and Justin Frieden—is there any reason for this particular order (i.e., game/soundtrack credits)?
 * It arranged by amount of contribution.
 * developed to → developed by, I think
 * Done.


 * recurring songs—consider making it clearer that this refers to recurrings series songs (perhaps link to here?)
 * Done.


 * Japanese singer should be removed for concision and consistency
 * Done.


 * four-disc edition, and an... → seven-disc edition and an...
 * Done.


 * Consider swapping the mention of the album and single, since the latter was released first (though I understand the reasoning for the former first)
 * Done.


 * music and video game journalists → music and video game journalists
 * Done.

Creation and development

 * Image caption needs a reference
 * Done.


 * asked to provide 140, the game's final total was over 200 songs, → asked to provide 140 songs, the game's final total was over 200,
 * Done.


 * Soken, Imamura and Ishikawa → Soken, Imamura, and Ishikawa
 * Done.


 * Composition
 * First two sentences use instead twice in close proximity—consider rephrasing
 * Done.


 * Eikons Ifrit and Phoenix—Eikons should be introduced here (instead of the second paragraph), perhaps in a footnote if difficult to phrase in prose
 * Done.


 * Maehiro, and localization... → Maehiro and localization...
 * Done.


 * usually orchestral—I assume "usually" means in the context of the series; consider making this clearer
 * Done.


 * made-up language → fictional language (and consider linking)
 * Done.


 * Ancient Greek. The translation was done by Timoslav Milković. → Ancient Greek by Timoslav Milković.
 * Done.


 * Theme songs
 * write the theme song for it → write its theme song
 * Done.


 * Link Square Enix, and consider introducing them as the developer and/or publisher
 * Done in the first paragraph of the whole section.


 * earlier songs which → earlier songs, which
 * Done.


 * pleased a heavy focus → placed a heavy focus
 * Remove the game's main protagonist
 * Done.


 * Introduce Jill in the second paragraph, instead of the third
 * Done.


 * full moon both see in the sky reads a little awkwardly at first—considering rephrasing to something like full moon they both see
 * Done.


 * he decided to make it → Yonezu decided to make it
 * Done.


 * Soken called → He called
 * Done.

Releases

 * Italicise Final Fantasy XVI Original Soundtrack in the infobox
 * Done.


 * The infobox should probably only list Soken in artist, as the primary composer
 * Done.


 * Link beta
 * Done.


 * one go → one sitting
 * Done.


 * Cat Bussell, writing a feature for TechRadar, → Cat Bussell of TechRadar
 * Done.


 * summed up the soundtrack as "the best... → called the soundtrack "the best...
 * Done.


 * Consider moving at The Game Awards 2023 to the end of the sentence for flow
 * Done.


 * Consider removing In an article on the single's release,
 * Done.


 * Billboard → Billboard Japan
 * Done.


 * Link Push Square
 * Done.

Images

 * File:The Primals @ Final Fantasy XIV Fanfest 2016.jpg is freely licensed on Commons and appropriately used
 * The soundtrack's cover art wouldn't be inappropriate here, but not necessary either

Result
Yep, that was as pleasant a read as I was expecting! Your command of language continues to be excellent, and always makes reviews enjoyable and content interesting. I've tried to be as thorough and nitpicky as possible—most of my comments are personal suggestions that you're welcome to disagree with, and anything written like this is purely a personal suggestion that can be safely ignored without impacting the review. I'll put the review on hold as procedure, but I expect this article will get its green plus very soon. Please feel free to voice any questions or concerns below (or above). – Rhain  ☔ (he/him) 00:59, 22 January 2024 (UTC)
 * I think I've sorted out everything essential raised above, and I've added an album cover for the main soundtrack. --ProtoDrake (talk) 10:21, 22 January 2024 (UTC)
 * Thanks for your quick changes! Three more quick notes:
 * If "amount of contribution" is measured by the number of tracks on the album, then I believe the order should be Imamura, Ishikawa, Frieden, and Yasaki—but perhaps there's a different measurement, so I'll leave this to you
 * Just to confirm, File:FFXVI album cover.jpg is an appropriate addition with a suitable rationale ✅
 * If you plan to take the article further, consider my note above about italicisation in refs, and add alt text to all images
 * And with that, this is yours: ! Thanks again for your hard work, as always. –  Rhain  ☔ (he/him) 12:48, 22 January 2024 (UTC)