Talk:Music of Sudan/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: REDMAN 2019 (talk · contribs) 11:09, 17 March 2021 (UTC)

This has been here for a while. I will review over the next few days. REDMAN 2019 ( talk ) 11:09, 17 March 2021 (UTC)

General

 * There are a lot of duplinks here. I would suggest installing User:Evad37/duplinks-alt to help with that.

Rural traditional music and dance

 * First sentence of the first paragraph needs referencing as per the ref section below.
 * Drums, Hand clapping, Dancing, Xylophone, Flute and Trumpet all needs linking.

Comments
I haven't been able to be on Wikipedia much over the last week and I may not be able to complete the review within the next 5 days. Here is what I have so far. If yo would like the review to be able to be completed sooner by someone else I fully understand and will ask to see if anyone is able to take over. REDMAN 2019 ( talk ) 17:53, 21 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Hello and thanks for your first remarks, - I have taken care of your comments and some others as well, adding a section for Notes, where I could incorporate remarks as well. - As you already have started to get familiar with this long article, I would suggest we wait, until we both will have finished the GA process. - If for any other reason you want to hand over to another person willing to finish this, that would be alright for me, too. Munfarid1 (talk) 12:12, 22 March 2021 (UTC)

Rural traditional music and dance

 * Link weddings.

The role of women in traditional music

 * I'm assuming the quote is from the book mentioned above. If so then it should be referenced there.
 * Didn't quite understand where you mean it to be referenced, but I did change the ref to the last sentence before the quote. (The quote carries the name of the book and page, so I hope that should be clear.
 * That should be fine.

Zikr rituals as religious forms of recitation and performance

 * Link Omdurman

The 1920s – Haqeeba, the roots of modern popular music in Sudan

 * I would remove the red-links. Especially as other people such as "Wad El Faki" aren't linked in that way.
 * Link Greater Khartoum to Khartoum (state)

The 1930s up to the 1950s – Rise of popular music through records, radio and music halls

 * Ref 24 has a Arabic title and links to a page which I can't make head or tail of. Can a clearer source be found?
 * Changed the name of the reference for this website from Arabic to English. BTW, it does mention the name and more information in English in the page itself.


 * The website used for ref 25 seems user generated and possibly biased in it's description of him. Could a alternative be found?
 * Deleted, and replaced by a better source. (Encyclopedic article from the Rough Guide to World Music)


 * Again the random red-link should probably be removed.
 * "Radio Omdurman" should be linked at it's first use, which is in the previous section.
 * The third paragraph needs referencing.
 * New ref to the encyclopedic article from the Rough Guide to World Music)


 * Publishing date needed for ref 27.
 * I added all publishing dates I could find, but there was an occasional webpage without date.


 * Link Khartoum.

Comments
Here is the first half of the full review. I am sorry for how long it's taken me. Should be able to do the rest soon. REDMAN 2019 ( talk ) 12:55, 28 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Hello again, I went through all your helpful comments and changed whatever you indicated. Looking forward to the rest... Thanks again, Munfarid1 (talk) 17:00, 28 March 2021 (UTC)

Problems with formatting recurrent references
Even after carefully reading and several attempts to solve this, I have not managed to enter the recurrent references to Verney 2006 with the corresponding page numbers. I entered this to the source text, but the page numbers don't show up in the saved version. - Can you help solve this mystery? Munfarid1 (talk) 09:31, 29 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Use the Sfn template and create a "Bibliography" section after "References". See refs 7 to 9 at Steven Gerrard for example. Cheers! REDMAN 2019  ( talk ) 11:52, 29 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Hello again, after long working sessions of studying the different templates and formats, I have checked and amended all references, including a section called 'Works cited' and inserting short references to these two main sources. (Albeit not with the template, but in the simpler way of a basic reference.) - I hope, now all is fine and am looking forward to your next remarks, and hopefully a nomination for GA. Munfarid1 (talk) 18:43, 1 April 2021 (UTC)

The 1960s up to the 1980s – The Golden Age of popular music in Sudan

 * Link Electric guitar.
 * Ref 42 is giving me Error 404.
 * There seems to be a problem with the formatting of ref 34.

The 1990s up to the 2000s – Restrictions through sharia law and the decline of popular music

 * Ref 53 should be moved to the end of the sentence it's referencing.

Reggae, hip hop and rap

 * Reggae should be linked at the first mention.

Urban contemporary music of the 21st century

 * 100,000 clicks on YouTube alone > 100,000 views on YouTube alone.
 * Link Beirut.
 * After the band split up > Since the band split up.
 * Ref 76 should cite YouTube as the source website.

Comments
After this I think we should be done here. REDMAN 2019 ( talk ) 11:18, 2 April 2021 (UTC)


 * All taken care of. Thanks again for your precise eye and helpful comments. Munfarid1 (talk) 13:07, 2 April 2021 (UTC)
 * No problem. Happy to pass this now. REDMAN 2019  ( talk ) 18:34, 2 April 2021 (UTC)