Talk:Music of the Spheres World Tour/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Vaughan J. (talk · contribs) 08:27, 21 June 2023 (UTC)



Calling dibs on this, but I'm starting this today! — VAUGHAN J.  ( TALK ) 08:27, 21 June 2023 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Infobox looks good.
 * Add a comma after concert tour ✅
 * Add the release year of Music of the Spheres
 * Add a comma after 50% ✅
 * "concert run features extensive use" → "concert features an extensive use" ✅
 * Add a comma after wristbands ✅
 * Move ref 2 to where some of the sections where the wristband switch is mentioned in this article. ✅
 * "Coldplay also partnered" → "Coldplay has also partnered" ✅

Background

 * Remove the YouTube broadcast, as that hasn't been mentioned in ref 4. – was changed to source that mentions it was broadcasted to YouTube

Sustainability

 * Image looks good.
 * "to utilise Sustainable Aviation Fuel from" → "to utilise sustainable aviation fuel from" ✅

Fans and accessibility

 * Good

Partnerships

 * "and provite help" → "and provide help" – Typo. ✅

Opening acts

 * Image looks good.
 * "Catt), Dominican Republic (with" → "Catt), the Dominican Republic (with" ✅

Concert synopsis

 * Good

Ticket sales

 * Image looks good.
 * Everything else looks good.

Venue records

 * Good

North America

 * Un-italicise NJ.com. ✅

Europe

 * Good

Rock in Rio

 * Image looks good.
 * Un-italicise UOL. ✅

Latin America

 * Un-italicise Omelete. ✅

Accolades

 * Good

Original broadcast

 * Infobox looks good.
 * Un-italicise IndieWire. ✅

Final version

 * Good

Music industry response

 * Good

Reduced emissions

 * Un-italicise BBC News. ✅

Cultural impact

 * Good

Economic influence

 * Good

Philanthropy

 * Good

Set list

 * Good

Tour dates

 * Good

Cancelled dates

 * Good

Personnel

 * Good

Gear

 * Good

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of these issues are fixed; only just some minor changes, but good job on the article! — VAUGHAN J.  ( TALK ) 08:45, 21 June 2023 (UTC)
 * Hello! I apologize for the grammar mistakes. I'm from Brazil, so English is not my first language! There were only two things from your notes that I haven't corrected yet: The wristband replacement (on it right now) and Music of the Spheres release year. The tour was announced a day before the album came out, so I felt like it would look redundant. GustavoCza' (talk • contribs) 11:41, 21 June 2023 (UTC)
 * Wristband switch corrected! Considering what I said in my first comment, is the album release year really necessary? GustavoCza (talk • contribs) 12:02, 21 June 2023 (UTC)
 * For the release year on the album, as you said, it depends on whether the tour was announced before the album came out the same year, so I'm actually gonna cross that out. — VAUGHAN J.  ( TALK ) 12:40, 21 June 2023 (UTC)
 * By the way, I've also checked the remaining issues that have been done. — VAUGHAN J.  ( TALK ) 12:40, 21 June 2023 (UTC)
 * now; good job on making changes on the article! No issues are left! — VAUGHAN J.  ( TALK ) 13:45, 21 June 2023 (UTC)
 * now; good job on making changes on the article! No issues are left! — VAUGHAN J.  ( TALK ) 13:45, 21 June 2023 (UTC)