Talk:Mutiny at Sucro

copy edit
I did a quick copy edit of the article, mostly aligning tense and replacing some over used phrases and words. One thing I wasn't clear on:

In the second paragraph of the "Development" section it says: Africanus sent a party of seven loyal military tribunes to Sucro, but they were very much resented in the camp. The next paragraph then says: Africanus sent the original seven military tribunes back to Sucro, the same tribunes who had been driven out of the camp earlier, to discover the reasons for the mutiny..

Do these two sentences refer to two separate missions (the seven loyal tribunes were sent to Sucro twice) or is it just mentioning the same mission twice? The fact that the "first" mission was "resented", while the second seems to have been successful would suggest the former, but this is not clear in the text.Volunteer Marek (talk) 22:51, 5 September 2011 (UTC)


 * Thanks for the excellent copyediting Volunteer Marek. I further explained about the seven loyal tribunes. If it is still not clear, let me know and I'll continue to work on it.--Doug Coldwell talk 11:52, 6 September 2011 (UTC)

One detail which may or may not be important, depending on how nit-picky and pedantic you wanna get here: the image in the article is showing a Roman soldier from 1st or 2nd century AD capturing a Dacian. Here we have Roman soldiers from 3rd or 2nd century BC capturing each other. The look/equipment/organization of the Roman army over this period did change quite substantially so this is an anachronism, although perhaps still somewhat useful. Just pointing it out.Volunteer Marek (talk) 23:03, 5 September 2011 (UTC)

Rewrite
I think the topic may warrant salvaging, so I started a rewrite from scratch. XOR&#39;easter (talk) 16:45, 5 March 2023 (UTC)
 * See WP:DCGAR (deleted and recreated per CCI). Sandy Georgia  (Talk)  21:22, 13 March 2023 (UTC)