Talk:Mutual Core/GA1

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Reviewer: 11JORN (talk · contribs) 01:08, 3 March 2013 (UTC)

Hello! I will review soon.  Jorn  talk 01:08, 3 March 2013 (UTC)


 * Please choose American or British English.
 * Can you please explain me what to change on the article? English is not my first language, and i'm still not good enough to distinguish between them.
 * For example, "3 December 2012" is British English, and "December 3, 2012" is American. And on the article you are using both, please choose only one.
 * The song was well received by contemporary music critics → Link music critics
 * In an interview published on Fréttablaðið the singer stated → Put a comma after "Fréttablaðið"
 * The project, called Biophilia comprises → The same as above for "Biophilia"
 * and to be including a series of workshops for children[8] in collaboration with local schools. → Put the ref at the end of the phrase.
 * "Mutual Core" has a subtitle, announced live at the Manchester International Festival performances, which is "Tectonic plates, chords". The subtitle refers to the physical phenomena related to the song and to musical resources also related to this physical phenomena. Moreover, every song on Biophilia has a characteristic color, featured on the album artwork and in the apps, and every tuning fork contained in the Ultimate Art Edition is also painted in the colour of the track. The color of "Mutual Core" is brown. → Where is the reference?
 * Other 2 remixes of "Crystalline" and "Sacrifice" → I think "Other two remixes" sounds better.
 * and to be including a series of workshops for children[8] in collaboration with local schools. → Put the ref at the end of the phrase.
 * "Mutual Core" has a subtitle, announced live at the Manchester International Festival performances, which is "Tectonic plates, chords". The subtitle refers to the physical phenomena related to the song and to musical resources also related to this physical phenomena. Moreover, every song on Biophilia has a characteristic color, featured on the album artwork and in the apps, and every tuning fork contained in the Ultimate Art Edition is also painted in the colour of the track. The color of "Mutual Core" is brown. → Where is the reference?
 * Other 2 remixes of "Crystalline" and "Sacrifice" → I think "Other two remixes" sounds better.
 * Other 2 remixes of "Crystalline" and "Sacrifice" → I think "Other two remixes" sounds better.

This is it for now. I'll continue tomorrow :)  Jorn  talk 15:57, 4 March 2013 (UTC)


 * BBC Music is not a printed publication. Remove the italics.
 * Sound designer David Paterson described the way Björk wanted the music on "Mutual Core" : "Bjork [...]" → Remove the space before the colon.
 * Link music critics
 * According to Mark Pytlik of Pitchfork → It is not a printed publication
 * Same for Popmatters.
 * "Mutual Core" was described as "best" and "climactic" by Helen Brown of Telegraph.co.uk → "Mutual Core" was described as "best" and "climactic" by Helen Brown of The Daily Telegraph
 * "literally volcanic" by Heather Phares of AllMusic → "literally volcanic" by Heather Phares of Allmusic and it is not a printed publication
 * Consequence of Sound is not a printed publication
 * Andy Gill of The Independent gave a negative review of the album, praising only the choral elements, stating that: "they’re a constant delight as she reflects upon her desire for the "dangerous gifts" of elemental nature, the lightning-flash of creative inspiration ("Thunderbolt") ; muses about being a bead threaded upon a DNA chain ("Hollow") ; explores the ethically neutral, natural attraction of parasite to host ("Virus") ; admires the creative force of volcanic energy ("Mutual Core")".[35] → Remove all spaces before these semicolons.
 * wearing a golden dress (by Michael van der Ham)[44], → put the comma before the ref
 * What Matters, Myspace, The Verge, Flavorwire, CraveOnline, io9 and Ology are not printed publications. Remove the italics of them
 * while Gary Pini of Papermag → The correct is Paper
 * Björk premiered Biophilia's songs → Itaclize Biophilia
 * During the "Mutual Core" performance the screen projected images of moving tectonic plates → Put a comma after "performance"
 * "Wearsthetrousers.com" sounds bad in this case. Try working in using "The website Wearsthetrousers" without italic.
 * Put quotation marks in the word "Jóga" as it is a song.
 * PembrokeMayball.com do the same thing I suggested for "Wearsthetrousers"
 * The "Versions" section is unreferenced. I'd remove it.
 * I changed to Track listing and added further references
 * What Matters, Myspace, The Verge, Flavorwire, CraveOnline, io9 and Ology are not printed publications. Remove the italics of them
 * while Gary Pini of Papermag → The correct is Paper
 * Björk premiered Biophilia's songs → Itaclize Biophilia
 * During the "Mutual Core" performance the screen projected images of moving tectonic plates → Put a comma after "performance"
 * "Wearsthetrousers.com" sounds bad in this case. Try working in using "The website Wearsthetrousers" without italic.
 * Put quotation marks in the word "Jóga" as it is a song.
 * PembrokeMayball.com do the same thing I suggested for "Wearsthetrousers"
 * The "Versions" section is unreferenced. I'd remove it.
 * I changed to Track listing and added further references
 * "Wearsthetrousers.com" sounds bad in this case. Try working in using "The website Wearsthetrousers" without italic.
 * Put quotation marks in the word "Jóga" as it is a song.
 * PembrokeMayball.com do the same thing I suggested for "Wearsthetrousers"
 * The "Versions" section is unreferenced. I'd remove it.
 * I changed to Track listing and added further references
 * The "Versions" section is unreferenced. I'd remove it.
 * I changed to Track listing and added further references
 * I changed to Track listing and added further references


 * I'll review the references before I put it on hold.  Jorn  talk 23:56, 5 March 2013 (UTC)


 * FN2 Rolling Stone is not linked and add the publisher, Jann Wenner.
 * FN3 Pitchfork is not linked and remove italics of it, and add the publisher, Ryan Schreiber.
 * FN5 The correct is Dazed & Confused and is missing the publisher, Waddell Limited.
 * FN6 Missing the publisher.
 * FN7 Link NME and the publisher is IPC Media
 * FN8 Remove the italics.
 * FN11 Link The Wall Street Journal and add the publisher Dow Jones & Company
 * FN12 Missing the publisher
 * FN13 Missing a publisher
 * FN14 Missing a publisher
 * FN15 Add the magazine Fact and the publisher The Vinyl Factory.
 * FN16 Remove the italics of bjork.com
 * FN17 Add the publisher Noise Made Me Do It without italics
 * FN18 Remove the italics of Beatport
 * FN19 Add the publisher for Pitchfork Media and remove italics
 * FN20 Change to Capital FM and add the publisher Global Radio
 * FN21 Remove the italics of PopMatters
 * FN22 Link Daily Mirror and add the publisher Trinity Mirror
 * FN23 Remove the italics of Wearsthetrousers.com
 * FN24 Change to BBC Music and the publisher is British Broadcasting Company
 * FN25 Change to The Daily Telegraph and the publisher is Telegraph Media Group
 * FN26 Add the publisher Waddell Limited
 * FN27 Add the publisher IPC Media
 * FN28 Link Télérama and the publisher Le Monde S.A
 * FN29 Change to Clash
 * FN30 Link The Guardian and the publisher is Guardian Media Group
 * FN31 Remove the italics
 * FN32 Link The Phoenix and the publisher is Phoenix Media/Communications Group
 * FN33 Link Los Angeles Times and the publisher is Tribune Company
 * FN34 The correct is The Independent and the publisher is Independent Print Limited
 * FN35 Missing the publisher
 * FN36 Missing a publisher
 * FN37 Remove the italics
 * FN38 Missing the publisher
 * FN39 Missing the publisher
 * FN40 Link The Huffington Post and the publisher is AOL
 * FN41 The correct is Paper and add the publisher
 * FN42 Missing a publisher
 * FN43 Remove the italics and link Style.com and add the publisher Fairchild Fashion Group
 * FN44 Link Scientific American and add the publisher Nature Publishing Group
 * FN45 Missing a publisher
 * FN46 Missing a publisher
 * FN47 Remove the italics
 * FN48 Link
 * FN49 Link
 * FN50 Add the publisher AOL
 * FN51 Remove the italics
 * FN52 Remove the italics
 * FN53 Add the publisher
 * FN54 Remove the italics
 * FN55 Link and remove the italics
 * FN56 Link Spin and add the publisher Buzz Media
 * FN57 Link and remove the italics and add the publisher Gawker Media
 * FN58 Link and remove the italics
 * FN59 Link The Atlantic and add the publisher Atlantic Media Company
 * FN60 Add a publisher
 * FN61 Add a publisher
 * FN62 Remove the italics
 * FN63 Change to Pitchfork Media and add the publisher
 * FN64 Add the publisher
 * FN65 Remove the italics
 * FN66 Remove the italics
 * FN67 Remove the italics and link Digital Spy, and add the publisher Hearst Corporation
 * FN68 Add the publisher
 * FN69 Add the publisher Spin Music Group
 * FN70 The correct is The Times and add the publisher News Corporation
 * FN71 Remove the italics
 * FN72 Link the publishers
 * FN73, 74, 75 Remove the italics
 * FN61 Add a publisher
 * FN62 Remove the italics
 * FN63 Change to Pitchfork Media and add the publisher
 * FN64 Add the publisher
 * FN65 Remove the italics
 * FN66 Remove the italics
 * FN67 Remove the italics and link Digital Spy, and add the publisher Hearst Corporation
 * FN68 Add the publisher
 * FN69 Add the publisher Spin Music Group
 * FN70 The correct is The Times and add the publisher News Corporation
 * FN71 Remove the italics
 * FN72 Link the publishers
 * FN73, 74, 75 Remove the italics


 * On hold. Wow, more than 70 references to fix, a lot to do. If you have any doubt, just call me at my talk page.  Jorn  talk 01:26, 10 March 2013 (UTC)

All ✅


 * It's been over three weeks since the nomination was put on hold, and I don't see any activity on the article or here. Perhaps the review should be closed soon? BlueMoonset (talk) 23:31, 1 April 2013 (UTC)
 * I have only recently seen this and have undertaken some of these tasks myself. I will do some more when I have time. FM [ talk to me  |  show contributions  ]  15:37, 2 April 2013 (UTC)

All refs were corrected by myself so I finally can pass.  Jorn  talk 21:16, 12 April 2013 (UTC)