Talk:My Bloody Valentine (band)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: FunkMonk (talk · contribs) 00:34, 15 July 2013 (UTC)


 * Hi, I will review this article some time today. FunkMonk (talk) 00:34, 15 July 2013 (UTC)
 * Under formation, the two last paragraphs end with unsourced sentences.
 * ✅ Added citations.


 * The end of the two first paragraphs under Island Records have the same problem.
 * ✅ Added citations.


 * Reunion and Legacy have such problems as well, please check for this throughout.


 * Why does the entire tracklist for their first demo tape need to be listed under formation?
 * ✅ Seeing as it was not listed in any other articles on Wikipedia. Removed and incorporated into This is Your Bloody Valentine.


 * "However, Creation Records co-founder Joe Foster, known as Slaughter Joe" do we really need to know the nickname of a guy who is only mentioned once?
 * ✅ Suppose not, removed.


 * "The audition process, which Shields described as "disastrous and excruciating", was unsuccessful due to Shields "mentioning The Smiths, because [he] liked their melodies." I don't get this sentence.
 * ✅ Added some additional prose for clarity.


 * Why no sample from Isn't Anything? Certainly more relevant than largely unknown EP tracks.
 * ✅ Included a sample of "You Never Should" in "Style" to accompany appropriate prose.


 * "The band recorded five songs at a mid-range studio" What does that mean?
 * Not a professional studio but a basement studio either. Removed "mid-range" due to possible further confusion.


 * Wouldn't it make more sense for the image of Shields featured before that of butcher?
 * I think placing Shields' image from 1989 in a section about 1985-86 wouldn't be the best idea; and Butcher's image is directly beside mention of her recruitment, which seems the best place for it.


 * "Artistry" seems a weird title for a band article, something like "style" would be more appropriate.
 * ✅ Changed to "Style".


 * The following sentence needs to be broken up: "Rumours of a My Bloody Valentine box set, which had circulated amongst the public in April 2008 following a listing on HMV Japan's web site,[50] began recirculating and after a number of reported delays, in March 2012 Sony Music Ireland announced the release of the compilation album EP's 1988–1991—a collection of the band's Creation Records extended plays, singles and unreleased tracks."


 * "One of the most recognisable aspects of My Bloody Valentine's sound is Shields' guitar sound" Could a word other than sound be used in one of the two occurrences?
 * ✅ Sure thing, changed first sound to "music".


 * "Spin writer Simon Reynolds has noted that the band's lyrics often contain sexual themes." Elaborate?


 * Shoegazing is overlinked. Should only appear once in the intro and article each.


 * I heard Ó Cíosóig left the band due to mental illness, could be noted if true.
 * I'm almost certain that was during the recording of Loveless, along with a number of other factors. I searched online but couldn't find mention of Ó Cíosóig's reasons for leaving the band.

Thanks for your review! Hope the recent edit resolved all these issues. Idiotchalk (t@lk) 19:51, 15 July 2013 (UTC)
 * Looks good, I saw them live last month, so it is nice to review this article. One last thing, it seems they also have a distinct visual style for their cover art, videos, and stage shows, maybe something could be mentioned about this? FunkMonk (talk) 11:49, 16 July 2013 (UTC)
 * Also, the second paragraph under Reunion should end with a source. FunkMonk (talk) 11:50, 16 July 2013 (UTC)
 * ✅ As for the visual style, you're absolutely right but all I've managed to find—online, at least—are two very vague mentions of the live "psychadelic" visuals which aren't exactly helpful. Idiotchalk (t@lk) 04:22, 17 July 2013 (UTC)
 * Alright. Could be good to elaborate on that if you want to take it to FAC one day, but it's good for now. Passed! FunkMonk (talk) 04:24, 17 July 2013 (UTC)