Talk:My Father's Song/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 15:43, 17 March 2017 (UTC)


 * Grabbing this for a review to keep my reviews of Streisand's songs going lol. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 17 March 2017 (UTC)


 * Comments
 * The third sentence in the lead's first paragraph reads somewhat awkwardly. I understand its meaning and what you were going for in the sentence, but the phrase "with Jeffrey Lesser serving as a producer as well" sounds a little strange to me. I would revise it. Here is my suggestion, but feel free to revise the sentence to what you feel is the most appropriate: Rupert Holmes wrote the song in collaboration with its producer Jeffrey Lesser.
 * In the lead's second paragraph, do you mean "liked" instead of "likened"?
 * In this sentence (Streisand had wanted to work with Holmes on her music, and he was considered relatively unknown before working with the singer.), I am not sure what the connection is between these two ideas. The connector "and" seems to be placing these two ideas in dialogue with one another, but I am not sure they are necessarily related. I would revise this make the meaning clearer. Maybe you could use something along the lines of the following: "Streisand worked closely with Holmes during the creation of the album. Prior to their collaboration, Holmes was considered to be relatively unknown." This is just a suggestion.
 * Also in the same sentence and the one directly following it, you use the word "work" three times in close proximity so I would add some variety.
 * This is more of a clarification question, but are there any more reviews of the song that you can include in the article, even in the context of a review of the main album? There is only one review of the song in the article at the present so I was just curious if there could be more material about its critical reception.


 * Final comments
 * Great work with this article. It was an interesting read. Once my comments are addressed, then I will pass this. Aoba47 (talk) 16:02, 17 March 2017 (UTC)
 * Thank you so much... again! You're really on a roll! In regards to the critical reception section, I've looked relentlessly for more reviews without luck. Unfortunately I cannot find anymore. Thank you again, cheers, Carbrera (talk) 16:14, 17 March 2017 (UTC).
 * I am just trying to help out as much as I possibly can since I have received a lot of great support/feedback for my GAN review. And I completely understand about the review so don't worry about it. It is unfortunately common for older songs. Aoba47 (talk) 16:20, 17 March 2017 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the response. Other than that I have completed making any changes to the article. :) Regards, Carbrera (talk) 16:22, 17 March 2017 (UTC).
 * Awesome work as always. ✅ Aoba47 (talk) 16:33, 17 March 2017 (UTC)