Talk:My Man (Tamar Braxton song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 21:42, 12 November 2017 (UTC)

Review arriving in the next days. Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 21:42, 12 November 2017 (UTC)
 * Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 22:33, 12 November 2017 (UTC)

Lead

 * as the lead single from the album → you can use "record" here to not repeat yourself
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 23:32, 13 November 2017 (UTC)


 * It was produced by Bob Robinson Jr. → use "My Man" instead of "It" here as your previous sentence also starts with "it"
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 23:32, 13 November 2017 (UTC)


 * The song is a ballad and torch song; the lyrics are about infidelity and its negative impact on a relationship. → A torch song and ballad, it lyrically adressed infidelity and its negative impact on a relationship
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 23:32, 13 November 2017 (UTC)


 * number three on the Adult R&B Songs Billboard chart, at number nineteen on the Hot R&B/Hip-Hop Airplay Billboard chart, and at number twenty-one on the Hot R&B Songs Billboard chart. → The single peaked at number three, 19 and 21 on Billboard Adult R&B... Hip-Hop Airplay component charts, respectively.
 * Revised, though I did not change the numbers as they need to remain consistent in the same sentence. Aoba47 (talk) 23:48, 13 November 2017 (UTC)

Infobox

 * I would capitalize "radio edit" to "Radio edit"
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 23:32, 13 November 2017 (UTC)


 * Unlink "Blind" in the chronology as the article doesn't exist
 * Unlinked. Aoba47 (talk) 23:32, 13 November 2017 (UTC)

Background and release

 * Unlink Tamar Braxton
 * I would prefer to keep it as it is the first time that Braxton is used in the body of the article. Aoba47 (talk) 23:39, 13 November 2017 (UTC)


 * "self-titled" is really not that encyclopedic, so I would replace it with "eponymous"
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 23:39, 13 November 2017 (UTC)


 * "My Man" was released on April 27, 2017; Braxton announced it through her official Instagram account → Did she announce it before or after the release? If it's before, you can say "...2017, preceded by an annoncement..." and if it was afterwards, use "...2017, followed by..."
 * I think it was done on the same day so I used the word "accompanied". Let me know if you would prefer something else. Aoba47 (talk) 23:39, 13 November 2017 (UTC)


 * about similar experiences → You need to contextualize "similar experiences". What do you mean by that?
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 23:39, 13 November 2017 (UTC)


 * Braxton featured the track during → Braxton can't "feature" a track on a TV show. Use "It was used for..." instead.
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 23:39, 13 November 2017 (UTC)


 * which aired the same day. → you repeat yourself with "in the same day"
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 23:39, 13 November 2017 (UTC)


 * had played it for her father; she told him that → had played it for her father, whom she told that
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 23:39, 13 November 2017 (UTC)

Lyrical interpretation

 * She connected the song's lyrics → The singer also connected the song's lyrics
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 23:42, 13 November 2017 (UTC)


 * called the song a "fiery torch song about → you say "song" two times here; replace the first instance with "it"
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 23:42, 13 November 2017 (UTC)


 * In the lead, you say the song was a ballad, but that is not included here
 * It is at the start of the third paragraph; the sentence is here (Billboard's Sadie Bell described "My Man" as an "emotional ballad"). Aoba47 (talk) 23:42, 13 November 2017 (UTC)

Reception

 * and The Boombox's Trent → replace "and" with "while"
 * Replaced. Aoba47 (talk) 23:46, 13 November 2017 (UTC)


 * Libby Hill pointed to Braxton's → "pointed to" is not the right word choice here. Use "pointed out"
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk)


 * "the next best break-up remedy since ice cream" → Haha
 * I like that quote too lol. It is a funny way of describing the song. I approve lol. Aoba47 (talk) 23:46, 13 November 2017 (UTC)


 * Numbers above ten shouldn't be written out. Also, fix the "Billborard chart" repetition in a similar way to the lead
 * I have changed the numbers, but I think that the chart part as I want to keep the information on the weeks on the charts. Aoba47 (talk) 23:46, 13 November 2017 (UTC)

Music video and promotion

 * The music video for "My Man" → This is an abrupt start for a section. Start with something like "An accompanying music video..."
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 23:49, 13 November 2017 (UTC)


 * video, Braxton goes to her lover's hotel room → use "the singer" here for alternation
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 23:49, 13 November 2017 (UTC)


 * before confronting him. After taking back her coat, Braxton leaves the hotel → before confronting him and taking back her coat to leave the hotel.
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 23:49, 13 November 2017 (UTC)

Track listings

 * The plural in the title is superfluous
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 23:50, 13 November 2017 (UTC)

Personnel

 * Flawless ;)
 * Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 23:51, 13 November 2017 (UTC)

Charts

 * Flawless ;)
 * Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 23:51, 13 November 2017 (UTC)

Release history

 * Fixed the table for you
 * Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 23:52, 13 November 2017 (UTC)

Copy-violation

 * 29.6% is acceptable!
 * Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 23:52, 13 November 2017 (UTC)

Outcome
Good job with the article! I've placed it for 7 days to allow edits from you. Please ping me when you're ready. Best regards and good luck, Cartoon network freak (talk) 21:31, 13 November 2017 (UTC)
 * Thank you for the review. I greatly appreciate your help! Aoba47 (talk) 23:58, 13 November 2017 (UTC)
 * Glad to pass this! Congrats; Cartoon network freak (talk) 20:58, 14 November 2017 (UTC)