Talk:N-heterocyclic silylene

Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment
This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 6 September 2018 and 11 December 2018. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Nblewis. Peer reviewers: Astatocarbon, Griffen.desroches.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 01:21, 18 January 2022 (UTC)

5.05 Peer Review

 * The margins of many early figures are extremely small or non-existent, and in the case of Figure 4, both the molecular structure and the heats of hydrogenation are outright cutoff.
 * The HOMO, HOMO-1, etc. of NHSilane should appear in the same “row” of the electronics section table as the saturated and unsaturated NHSi. Consistency should be maintained if possible.
 * In general, according to the Wiki manual of styles, abbreviations such as Et, Pr, Bu, etc. are to be avoided if possible. This is not a hard prohibition, but a recommendation for writers.
 * Figure 2: the caption should not credit the synthetic scheme to “Ref 2”, but to “Denk and West”.
 * Figure 2: If possible, English text should not be included in reaction schemes, as it prevents their reuse in other languages
 * Synthesis and Stability, Paragraph 2: “silylenes… decomposes” goes from plural to singular tense
 * In that same sentence: writing the chemical formula in the sentence seems unnecessary, and could stand to be removed.
 * In fact, all mentions of “[tBuN-CH=CH-tBuN]Si” could be replaced with “West and Denk’s silylene”, or even just “the compound” in subsequent sentences.
 * A general 3D model may be aesthetically pleasing if placed at the top of the page, near the page title/intro section
 * Electronics, paragraph 1, lines 4-5: “The original… nitrogen lone pairs.” Appears to be a run-on sentence
 * Same sentence: “Designats” -> designates
 * Electronics, paragraph 2: Instead of an exact number (0.54 electrons), could say “the presence of a non-zero electron density in the formally empty Si 3p orbital indicates that” or something to that effect.
 * The reference to the NBO paper should come earlier in the second “electronics” paragraph
 * Electronics, paragraph 2, last line: Instead of “the NHSi studied”, could say “the silylene in question/of concern/of interest”
 * Beginning of third electronics paragraph: “based on bond energy at critical point calculations” is unnecessary – interested readers can go read the AIM page itself and learn that information
 * Electronics, end of third paragraph: could simply say “Si has a higher Laplacian between it and the group 11 metals than does C, indicating a lesser degree of covalent interaction”.
 * Reactions with chalcogens, first sentence: tenses disagree – starts present tense and ends past tense.
 * Does the geometry (puckered vs. planar) vary between gas-phase electron diffraction and solid-phase XRD? It can in many systems.
 * Synthesis section notes that it's important to prevent over-reduction of Si. Perhaps briefly comment on possible impurities/side reactions that might arise from such overreduction.

Overall, the article is well-written and shows great care and diligence with respect to the source material. The writing itself contains some grammatical errors, and could also stand to be written more succinctly. For example, there's no need to give an exhaustive rundown of AIM when the theory itself already has it's own Wikipedia article. In revising the article, focus on making it more succinct and easily digested by the general public. Avoid jargon if possible, and add links to other Wikipedia articles when relevant. Also, try to fix the margins on some of the figures.