Talk:NFL collective bargaining agreement

More detailed introduction
Hi to any editors watching this (very new) page. I'd like to proposed a longer introduction for this article, to address the tag on the page. As you can see from the connected contributor template above, I do have a financial conflict of interest with this topic as I am working as a consultant to the NFLPA, for whom (and with whose input) I prepared the original draft of this article. Due to that, I won't make any edits to the article, preferring instead that editors review my suggestions and make what edits seem appropriate.

Based on Becky Sayles' feedback regarding the introduction, I've put together a longer version and share it below for editors to take a look. If this seems like an improvement on the current introduction, I hope someone will add this to the article.

Thanks in advance for taking a look. The above is a proposed wording, so I'm open to any adjustments that might be needed. Let me know if you have any questions. 16912 Rhiannon (Talk · COI) 21:06, 30 January 2015 (UTC)
 * I see absolutely no issues with this introduction. Sorry you had to wait so long for someone to notice it!  Toa   Nidhiki05  19:16, 4 March 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks so much! 16912 Rhiannon (Talk &middot; COI) 14:55, 10 March 2015 (UTC)