Talk:NMS Regina Maria/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: L293D (talk · contribs) 22:26, 13 November 2018 (UTC)

Very nice article - will be doing this in the next couple days. This review will be very similar to the one at Talk:NMS Regele Ferdinand/GA1, but this is not a copy and paste of it. L293D (☎ • ✎) 19:51, 13 November 2018 (UTC)

Lead

 * Add a couple sentences about the laying down, launching, and commissioning after opening sentence.

Background and design

 * Add or  to Regele Ferdinand-class destroyer
 * and the fire-control system was from Germany - remove "was".
 * The Regele Ferdinand-class ships had an overall length of 101.9 metres (334 ft 4 in), had a beam of 9.6 metres - remove second had.
 * and a mean draught of - what does "mean" do here?
 * Merge sentence 2 and 3 in second para.
 * Link 8.8 cm Flak 18/36/37/41 at the end of 4th para.

Construction and Career

 * named for Queen Marie of Romania - after would do better
 * laid down by Pattison[7] in 1927 at their Naples, Italy, shipyard. - reword, reads confusingly.
 * The ship was assigned to the Destroyer Squadron - was there only one destroyer squadron in Romania?
 * Link Constanța.
 * Link Crimean Offensive somewhere - that's what the boat did for most of its war service.
 * The phrase "the Romanians" comes up in two consecutive sentences in para 2 - change one to "Romanian Navy" or something similar.
 * when she was discarded - to my knowledge, discarded is not a nautical term. Stricken might do better.
 * All done. See if my changes work for you. And thanks for your review.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 22:11, 19 November 2018 (UTC)

GA Progress

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