Talk:Naji Marshall/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 10:54, 1 March 2020 (UTC)

Going to review this article. MWright96 (talk) 10:54, 1 March 2020 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Lead

 * "Marshall attended two high schools and Hargrave Military Academy as a postgrad" - formal; postgraduate
 * Done. ~ EDDY  ( talk / contribs )~ 15:01, 1 March 2020 (UTC)
 * Wikilink points per game for those unfamiliar with basketball
 * Done. ~ EDDY  ( talk / contribs )~ 15:01, 1 March 2020 (UTC)

High school career

 * "and now coaches basketball at an elementary school," - and is now a basketball coach to avoid WP:LIMITED in the Cincicatti Enquirer source
 * Done. ~ EDDY  ( talk / contribs )~ 15:07, 1 March 2020 (UTC)
 * "Marshall has five brother's and one sister" - brothers
 * Done. ~ EDDY  ( talk / contribs )~ 15:07, 1 March 2020 (UTC)
 * Wikilink point to Point (basketball), rebound to Rebound (basketball), assist to Assist (basketball) and steal to Steal (basketball) for those unfamiliar with basketball terms
 * To me this is excessive, but ok. ~ EDDY  ( talk / contribs )~ 15:07, 1 March 2020 (UTC)
 * "He led Eleanor Roosevelt to a 24–3 record" - The Washington Post has the record at 23–3
 * Good catch. ~ EDDY  ( talk / contribs )~ 15:07, 1 March 2020 (UTC)
 * "as a postgrad to improve his academics" - formal; postgraduate student
 * Done. ~ EDDY  ( talk / contribs )~ 15:07, 1 March 2020 (UTC)
 * "but committed to" - more complete but committed to playing college basketball for
 * Done. ~ EDDY  ( talk / contribs )~ 15:07, 1 March 2020 (UTC)
 * "He competed for DC Premier on the AAU circuit." - spell out AAU in full
 * I spelled it out and used AAU as a common abbreviation. ~ EDDY  ( talk / contribs )~ 15:07, 1 March 2020 (UTC)

College career

 * "Marshall contributed 12 points and four rebounds in his collegiate opener" - formal; opening game
 * Done. ~ EDDY  ( talk / contribs )~ 15:15, 1 March 2020 (UTC)
 * Wikilink jump shot for those who are not versed in basketball
 * Done. ~ EDDY  ( talk / contribs )~ 15:15, 1 March 2020 (UTC)
 * "and notching four assists" - more formal; achieving
 * Changed to "dished out four assists". ~ EDDY  ( talk / contribs )~ 15:15, 1 March 2020 (UTC)
 * "He was named to the Second Team All-Big East as a sophomore." - The Cincinnati Enquirer states league coaches named Marshall to this team and thus can be mentioned in this article
 * Ok. ~ EDDY  ( talk / contribs )~ 15:15, 1 March 2020 (UTC)
 * Wikilink Julius Erving Award
 * Done. ~ EDDY  ( talk / contribs )~ 15:15, 1 March 2020 (UTC)
 * "He sat out a game against Western Carolina on December 18 with an illness." - you can state he had a stomach virus as mentioned by the Asheville Citizen Times
 * Changed to more specific. ~ EDDY  ( talk / contribs )~ 15:15, 1 March 2020 (UTC)