Talk:Nana's Party/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 17:23, 30 May 2016 (UTC)


 * Grabbing this for a review; I will have my comments up in a couple days if that is okay with you. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 May 2016 (UTC)

Lead and infobox

 * Provide a subtitle for the image in the infobox.
 * Sure, done. Josh Milburn (talk) 21:26, 30 May 2016 (UTC)
 * Insert “the” before “hidden character”.
 * Good spot. Josh Milburn (talk) 21:26, 30 May 2016 (UTC)
 * Can you introduce Alan Ayckbourn and Mike Leigh? I was not familiar with each of these two men before reading the article so a brief descriptive term/title before the person's name would be helpful. I am probably not familiar with these names as I am an American, but I feel that is always important to absolutely clear.
 * No problem. Josh Milburn (talk) 21:26, 30 May 2016 (UTC)
 * I would suggest you do the same for Abigail’s Party (such as clarifying that is a play).
 * Done. Josh Milburn (talk) 21:26, 30 May 2016 (UTC)

Writing

 * Make sure to include an alt. for both images (the Reece Shearsmith and Lorraine Ashbourne images).
 * I'm never sure what to put in these, so I've just gone for the actors' names. Is that right? (I've also added one for the episode poster.) Josh Milburn (talk) 21:26, 30 May 2016 (UTC)
 * The phrase ”was upped” sounds a little too informal so I would suggest using something stronger.
 * Yes, done. Josh Milburn (talk) 21:26, 30 May 2016 (UTC)
 * Clarify that Absent Friends is a play.
 * Done. Josh Milburn (talk) 21:26, 30 May 2016 (UTC)

Casting and characters

 * Add a descriptive phrase in front of Life is Sweet and Benidorm for a reader unfamiliar with either topic.
 * Good idea, done. Josh Milburn (talk) 21:26, 30 May 2016 (UTC)

Filming and direction

 * I understand the meaning behind “basically as-was”, but it sounds a little awkward and I think there is a stronger way of phrasing this.
 * That's fair- I've gone for "Scenes in a bedroom used the room mostly as the production team found it." How's that? Josh Milburn (talk) 21:26, 30 May 2016 (UTC)
 * Otherwise, great work with the “Production” section overall.
 * Thanks! Josh Milburn (talk) 21:26, 30 May 2016 (UTC)

Plot

 * Great job with this section!
 * Thanks! Josh Milburn (talk) 21:26, 30 May 2016 (UTC)

Analysis

 * The sentence construction with the Chris Bennion’s quote is slightly awkward and also the meaning of “this” is not obvious so clarify this point.
 * Yes, I see. I've rejigged it slightly; hopefully it is now clearer. Josh Milburn (talk) 21:26, 30 May 2016 (UTC)
 * Remove the “do” in between “than” and “Jim and Angela”.
 * Sure. Josh Milburn (talk) 21:26, 30 May 2016 (UTC)
 * Otherwise, great work.
 * Thanks! Josh Milburn (talk) 21:26, 30 May 2016 (UTC)

Reception
Great work; I have nothing to suggest here.
 * Thanks! Josh Milburn (talk) 21:26, 30 May 2016 (UTC)

Final comments

 * I am very impressed with the work put into this article; I only have a few minor suggestions to offer in my review. Once you address my comments, this should be a quick and easy pass. Aoba47 (talk) 20:15, 30 May 2016 (UTC)
 * Thanks so much for taking the time to have a look at the article, your kind comments, and your very good suggestions. I have, I hope, dealt with everything. Josh Milburn (talk) 21:26, 30 May 2016 (UTC)
 * Thank you for your quick responses to my comments. You have done awesome work with this page. ✅ Aoba47 (talk) 21:55, 30 May 2016 (UTC)
 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail: