Talk:Naomi Osaka/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 20:33, 8 March 2019 (UTC)

Shall review this article. MWright96 (talk) 20:33, 8 March 2019 (UTC)
 * Thanks, MWright96! I just updated the article to reflect this year's results, so it should be ready to look at. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 01:10, 11 March 2019 (UTC)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Lede

 * Wikilink serve to Serve (tennis)
 * Done. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 17:32, 11 March 2019 (UTC)

Early life and background

 * "while he was a college student from New York." - in
 * Done. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 17:32, 11 March 2019 (UTC)
 * "with regard to the detailed plan Richard had developed for his kids." - informal; should be children
 * Changed to daughters. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 17:32, 11 March 2019 (UTC)
 * Wikilink Pembroke Pines and United States Tennis Association
 * Done. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 17:32, 11 March 2019 (UTC)

2011–15: WTA Tour match win at age 16, top 150

 * "In September 2013, Osaka turned pro shortly before turning 16 years old" - professional
 * Done. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 17:32, 11 March 2019 (UTC)
 * "These victories helped her break into the top 250 of the WTA rankings" - progress is more formal
 * Done. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 17:32, 11 March 2019 (UTC)
 * " she upset world No. 19 Samantha Stosur" - use the abbr template on No. so readers hovering over it know it means number
 * Done. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 17:32, 11 March 2019 (UTC)
 * Wikilink wild card to Wild card (sports)
 * Done. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 17:32, 11 March 2019 (UTC)
 * Add a link to El Paso, Texas
 * Done. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 17:32, 11 March 2019 (UTC)

2016: First WTA final, Newcomer of the Year, top 50

 * "Her results during this stretch were good enough to bring her onto the cusp of the top 100" - near to
 * Done. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 17:32, 11 March 2019 (UTC)
 * "which allowed her WTA Tour-level events all year." - which allowed her to play in
 * Done. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 17:32, 11 March 2019 (UTC)
 * "With this success, she cracked the top 100 of the WTA rankings for the first time." - progressed into
 * Done. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 17:32, 11 March 2019 (UTC)
 * "She then did not play the grass court season after suffering an injury shortly after the French Open." - what type of injury?
 * The source I used doesn't specify, and I can't find it elsewhere. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 17:32, 11 March 2019 (UTC)

2017: Slight regression, two top 10 victories

 * "she did not win another main draw match on clay the rest of the season." - for the remainder
 * Done. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 17:32, 11 March 2019 (UTC)

2018: US Open champion, Indian Wells title, world No. 4

 * "and extended her win streak one additional match in her first ever meeting against her childhood idol Serena Williams," - streak by one additional match
 * Done. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 17:32, 11 March 2019 (UTC)
 * "where she lost to top seeded Barty in the semifinals." - to top seed
 * Done. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 17:32, 11 March 2019 (UTC)
 * "she defeated Serena Williams for the second time this year to win her first major title." - in 2018
 * Done. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 17:32, 11 March 2019 (UTC)
 * Wikilink hamstring injury to Pulled hamstring
 * Done. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 17:32, 11 March 2019 (UTC)

Hopman Cup

 * Wikilink ace to Ace (tennis)
 * Done. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 17:32, 11 March 2019 (UTC)

Playing style

 * Wikilink forehand, serve and long rallies to their respective articles for non-Tennis readers
 * Done. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 17:32, 11 March 2019 (UTC)

Coaches

 * "Following her tough loss at the 2016 US Open," - heavy to avoid editoralizing
 * Changed to "Following her loss at the 2016 US Open where she could not convert a 5–1 lead in the third set"
 * Wikilink Japan Tennis Association
 * Done. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 17:32, 11 March 2019 (UTC)

Endorsements

 * Explain what IMG is to the casual reader
 * Done. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 17:32, 11 March 2019 (UTC)
 * "Osaka is a brand ambassador for Japanese automobile manufacturer Nissan Motor" - just Nissan is sufficient
 * Done. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 17:32, 11 March 2019 (UTC)

Personal life

 * "She has been described as various combinations of Japanese, Haitian, and American." - described by whom?
 * Added "by the media" Sportsfan77777 (talk) 17:33, 11 March 2019 (UTC)
 * "while her mother spoke to her in Japanese." - change to conversed for variety and to avoid close reptition of the same word
 * Done. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 17:32, 11 March 2019 (UTC)
 * "Her coach Sascha Bajin was initially confused by her personality," - this statement should be updated to reflect that Bajin is Osaka's former coach
 * Done. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 17:32, 11 March 2019 (UTC)