Talk:Narcisa Hirsch

Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment
This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 7 January 2019 and 27 April 2019. Further details are available on the course page. Peer reviewers: Milliekirchberg.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 01:24, 18 January 2022 (UTC)

Sophie's Peer Review
Peer Review Input: -I would add a picture of her (normally the little biography section that wikipedia pages have) that includes the key details about her, such as her birth date and death (if she's dead yet), her spouse, what she's known for, where she's from, etc -Her education is still empty so I'd look into where she went to college or if she got any sort of formal education anywhere -For this sentence in your page: "By 1960, Hirsch had married Paul Hirsch, adopted his surname, and raised four children with him, when she joined an avante garde group consisting of Claudio Caldini, Juan José Mugni, Juan Villola, Horacio Valleregio and Marie Louise Alemann, where Hirsch's focus was on bringing art to the people through performance. She and Alemann were co-leaders of the group." I would break up the part about children and her avante garde group into 2 separate sentences. -It would be nice if you could include a picture or two of different art pieces she's done so your reader has a visual for what you're discussing (maybe a photograph from Marabunta or something) -"Marabunta, which was performed in 1967 by both her and the other members of the group she was a part of." ^that isn't a complete sentence -Nice background on her film experience -I think you do a good job of talking about the places she's lived in/her film background, however I'd love to see more specifics about her actual work as an artist and other pieces she's done -It would also be nice to include where she's had exhibitions and what type of successes she's had with her artwork -So far you only have one source so I'd try and find more to validate your work/add more details -I like how you break up each section and as long as you make sure to fill out each of those parts I think it'll cover her experiences well -Over all a solid start!!!

Milliekirchberg (talk) 01:55, 15 February 2019 (UTC)Millie