Talk:Narinder Kumar Mehra/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Mike Christie (talk · contribs) 11:50, 25 January 2018 (UTC)

I'll review this. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 11:50, 25 January 2018 (UTC)


 * Thanks mate --jojo@nthony (talk) 12:32, 25 January 2018 (UTC)


 * Three external links are dead: see here.
 * ✅ Two dead links removed, one replaced, additional citation provided--jojo@nthony (talk) 10:08, 26 January 2018 (UTC)


 * It's best to introduce acronyms such as AIIMS before you used them; ideally ICMR too. Conversely, you don't need to introduce "MSc" as an abbreviation, because you don't use it in the rest of the article.
 * ✅--jojo@nthony (talk) 10:10, 26 January 2018 (UTC)


 * In the biography section I would suggest moving the mention of his professorship in 1993 to later in the article to keep things in chronological order.
 * ✅--jojo@nthony (talk) 10:14, 26 January 2018 (UTC)


 * At the time of his retirement from service in 2004, he was serving as the Dean of Research and post-retirement: what does "and post-retirement" mean?
 * ✅ Copy edited. It was an error on my part while removing the word superannuation.--jojo@nthony (talk) 10:17, 26 January 2018 (UTC)


 * As of now: use "As of" whatever the latest source year for this is instead.
 * ✅ Corrected --jojo@nthony (talk) 10:18, 26 January 2018 (UTC)


 * His research has been documented by way of several articles; ResearchGate an online repository of scientific articles has listed 287 of them. I'd cut all of this.  Of course his research has been documented; he's a scientist.  And the number of articles listed on ResearchGate isn't that interesting a fact.
 * ✅ I have reworded the sentence. ResearchGate reference will help easy navigation to Mehra's articles.--jojo@nthony (talk) 10:23, 26 January 2018 (UTC)


 * What's the basis for saying he's widely cited? There are citation metrics; is that what you're using?
 * ResearchGate reference in the previous sentence shows his citations, I was just providing a few direct examples.--jojo@nthony (talk) 10:30, 26 January 2018 (UTC)


 * The page numbers in some of your footnotes are odd-looking: "pp. 228-" for example. If it's a range you need the last page number; if not, get rid of the en dash and make it "p." instead of "pp.".
 * ✅ That's an error {T} Wikipedia citation tool for Google Books makes. I have corrected the error.--jojo@nthony (talk) 10:28, 26 January 2018 (UTC)


 * Advanced Course on Basic and Translational Immunology of conducted by FIMSA: looks like a missing word?
 * ✅ copy edited--jojo@nthony (talk) 10:33, 26 January 2018 (UTC)


 * He...was a faculty of the 2016 edition of ISHICON: no, he wasn't! Not sure what you did mean to say.
 * The inline citation clearly mentions him as one of the faculty. The webpage has a section FACULTY ISHICON 2016 and his profile is given there. --jojo@nthony (talk) 10:37, 26 January 2018 (UTC)


 * He has been associated with journals such as Microbes and Infection of Pasteur Institute, Paris, International journal of Human Genetics and Journal of Clinical Immunology of Springer: a bit vague; what does it mean to be associated with a journal?
 * ✅ copy edited and clarified --jojo@nthony (talk) 10:42, 26 January 2018 (UTC)

-- That's it for a first pass. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 03:45, 26 January 2018 (UTC)

All looks good now. I added the ResearchGate reference to the statement that he is widely cited; and I made it "a member of the faculty" for the reference to the 2016 ISHICON -- perhaps Indian English is different, but in British English and American English "he was a faculty" would mean he was several people. Everything else is fixed, so passing GA. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 11:06, 26 January 2018 (UTC)


 * Thanks mate --jojo@nthony (talk) 11:19, 26 January 2018 (UTC)