Talk:Naroda Patiya massacre/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Hahc21 (talk · contribs) 05:24, 17 November 2012 (UTC)

Review
Update As of November 27, 2012, ΛΧΣ  21™  has no internet connection and will finish the review at a later point in time. Thank you. DivaKnockouts (talk) 03:43, 28 November 2012 (UTC)

Prose comments

 * Lead
 * Will look at later
 * Background
 * "Following the attack,... during the Godhra train attack". Repetitiveness of "attack"
 * Done
 * The massacre
 * Good
 * Aftermath
 * "total deaths went up from 1044 to 1267". be consistent with the use of 1,044 or 1044 (commas)
 * Done
 * I see overlinking of Sunder Singh Bhandari
 * Done
 * "Chief minister" or "Chief Minister"?
 * Done
 * I see overlinking of Narendra Modi, and also, on "The massacre" section, you appoint "Chief Minister" but do not mention her name.
 * Done (Modi is a he =P)
 * "Under pressure from the opposition party, the Indian National Congress, the committee". Something is missing, which committee? The sentence is broken after "Congress,"
 * Done
 * "which refused to stay the order.[51][52][53][54][55]" Isn't it better if you distribute the citations inside the paragraph?
 * Done
 * I have read until "Allegations against state government and Narendra Modi" and everything seems fine. I will keep reading tonite. — ΛΧΣ  21™  20:05, 2 December 2012 (UTC)


 * Passed. — ΛΧΣ  21  23:26, 10 December 2012 (UTC)