Talk:Nasib al-Bakri/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 00:20, 7 June 2016 (UTC)

I'll give this a review. Wizardman 00:20, 7 June 2016 (UTC)

Haven't forgotten about this. Did read lead and early life so far and saw no issues, I'll read the rest ideally tomorrow. Wizardman 02:41, 11 June 2016 (UTC)

Here's what I found:
 * "It was at the al-Bakri family home where Nasib invited Faisal to join al-Fatat, which he reportedly agreed to." when was this? adding a date for context would be helpful since it's starting off the section.
 * "During this period and until 1920," rm and, flows better without it.
 * "His younger brother As'ad was killed in action in 1926" I feel like this would fit better somewhere in the earlier section, rather than in the post-revolt one.

Only found a couple minor issues. I'll put this on hold and will pass when fixed. Wizardman 18:21, 11 June 2016 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review, I've addressed the issues you brought up. Let me know if there's anything else that should be revised. Cheers --Al Ameer (talk) 19:28, 11 June 2016 (UTC)

Did another run-through and everything looks good, so I'll pass the article. Wizardman 22:10, 11 June 2016 (UTC)
 * Great! Thanks again --Al Ameer (talk) 22:22, 11 June 2016 (UTC)