Talk:Nathaniel Mendez-Laing/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Courcelles (talk · contribs) 17:17, 26 October 2018 (UTC)


 * I'll give this one a read. Courcelles (talk) 17:17, 26 October 2018 (UTC)


 * Infobox is about two months out of date.
 * He's been injured since his appearance on 25 August, so has played no games since then.


 * Why say "Over 50", "Over 80" in the lead instead of simply giving the exact numbers? - Changed
 * The phrasing of the sentence that starts "Having represented England at under-16 and under-17 level, he made his senior début on 25 August 2009" implies that that was his senior debut for England, please rephrase. - Done
 * Also, how old was he at his senior debut? - Added
 * "starting a 3–0 victory over" We Americans would say "Starting in a..", but I'm not sure if you're missing a word here or if it is just regional differences... Fixed
 * "He made forty appearances in total, scoring five times, during the season as Peterborough made the play-offs, where they won promotion back to the Championship at the first attempt." Needs citation. - Done
 * When is the "close season"? - Done
 * "Instead of move back to" Moving? - Fixed
 * "after the clubs agreed an undisclosed" agreed to an?
 * This may be more of a British thing, I believe it's more standard to use an undisclosed fee. See a few examples, The Daily Telegraph, Sky Sports and Liverpool


 * Believed to be 100,000 pounds according to whom? - Removed
 * "debut" "début"  Doesn't matter to me which you use, but you should only be using one. - Fixed
 * "Peterboroug's relegation" Typo - Done
 * "switched number shirt" Shirt number would sound more natural? - Fixed
 * "in the 74th minutes" No need for that to be plural. - Done
 * Rochdale... so much to say about his first year there, and almost nothing about his second?
 * I've expanded the whole section now to hopefully cover his time a bit more thoroughly.


 * "well as, being" Do we need that comma? - Removed
 * Anything to say about his U16 and U17 appearances for England at all?
 * I've searched quite a bit but, other than basic "played for England at U16 and U17 levels" mentions, there doesn't seem to be any real info on his appearances.


 * Anything to say about his life outside of football other than he was once in traffic court? Is this really significant enough to put on a BLP's "permanent record", so to speak?
 * His speeding conviction was part of the page before I began working on it. I have no strong feelings on it staying or being removed.
 * I think I'd lose it at this point, given that's literally all we have to say about his "personal life", and a traffic ticket is not a fair summary of someone in that aspect. Courcelles (talk) 20:22, 26 October 2018 (UTC)

That's all from me. Courcelles (talk) 17:34, 26 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review, I've made a start. Hopefully get through these as soon as possible. Kosack (talk) 18:34, 26 October 2018 (UTC)
 * I've responded to all of the comments raised above, let me know your thoughts. Kosack (talk) 20:09, 26 October 2018 (UTC)
 * One comment, I know we're all trying to score some more points before the Wikicup ends! Courcelles (talk) 20:22, 26 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Ha, I'm well out of the running now, quite happy to have made the final round more than anything. I've removed the traffic infringement. Kosack (talk) 20:33, 26 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Looks good, promoted. Courcelles (talk) 20:35, 26 October 2018 (UTC)