Talk:National Museum (Prague)

— Preceding unsigned comment added by Paigebrazil (talk • contribs) 15:30, 1 March 2019 (UTC)

Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment
This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 13 February 2019 and 3 May 2019. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Paigebrazil.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 04:56, 17 January 2022 (UTC)

Editing Article for Class Assignment
Howdy! I am a student at Texas A&M University and I am currently enrolled in an undergraduate technical editing course. One of our major projects is editing a Wikipedia article. I have never used this interface before, but I am learning and excited for this challenge. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Paigebrazil (talk • contribs) 15:44, 4 March 2019 (UTC)

Here are my comprehensive edit notes: Right off the bat, I feel as if the first sentence is a little wordy; I think it can be more concise and get to the point sooner. The following two sentences are choppy and do not contribute to the flow of information. Moving to the "Origins" section, the flow of information seems inadequate and not very structured. I think there should be a hyperlink for "French Revolution," some background information, or both because not every reader will be familiar with that era of time. Likewise, this section mentions The Society of Patriotic Friends of the Arts - what is it? who was a part of it? how did/does it impact the museum? is it still in effect today? There is some background information regarding the society, however I feel it is minimal and doesn't fully help the reader understand the importance/relationship between them and the museum. The "The National Museum in Prague" section is, for the most part, thorough with the information presented. I am seeing more of the wordy, lengthy sentences that could be more concise for a better flow/understanding of information. The "Collections and Departments" section needs to be reworked. The current organization is seems cramped and each section not indicated by a bullet seem random and out of flow. I also think the headings in this section need some work. The "Main Building" section seems random and thrown into the article. I want to integrate that information in a better way, I'm just not sure how I want to do that quite yet. Overall, the main issues I see are: structure/organization, flow of information, sentence structure, and copy editing needs.

Sandbox: User:Paigebrazil/sandbox/nationalmuseum Paigebrazil (talk) 15:43, 16 March 2019 (UTC)Paigebrazil

The duration of my assignment has come to an end! After my edits, I feel the article is more precise, organized, and reads more like a Wikipedia article. My only concern is if all the collections and departments at the museum are presented in the article. Paigebrazil (talk) 02:20, 18 March 2019 (UTC)Paigebrazil