Talk:Need for Speed: Undercover/GA1

GA Review
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Comments

 * The lead is far too short. Per WP:LEAD: "The lead section should briefly summarize the most important points covered in an article in such a way that it can stand on its own as a concise version of the article."  There is no mention of the development of the game in the lead, none of the plot, nor of reception for the game.  Additionally, platforms should be alphabetized and all references should be moved out of the lead and into the body (where possible) per WP:LEADCITE.
 * There are redlinks to things that could easily be wikilinked, such as police vehicles and Lamborgini Gallardo (which should be Lamborghini Gallardo)
 * References should appear after punctuation, and if it's sufficient to use the reference once for the whole sentence, do so. There are a few instances where a ref is used twice in a sentence and it's not necessary.  For instance, the third paragraph in the Gameplay section needs only one reference at the end of the paragraph.
 * The NFS title "ProStreet" should be wikilinked to the game the first time its mentioned
 * Multiple paragraphs are over 6-7 lines long. Consider breaking these paragraphs into two so that the reader is not overwhelmed.
 * Some paragraphs are only one or two lines long. These should be merged with another appropriate paragraph.
 * Reference #28 is a dead link
 * There are several disambig links
 * Reference #13 needs formatting using Template:cite web
 * Reference #8 should be linking to the actual review, and should mention both the author and the review date
 * Reference dates should have a consistent format. Use either "September 13, 2008" or "2008-09-13", but not both
 * The "Extras" section is completely unnecessary
 * The Reception section makes no mention of aggregate scores in the prose, and is not organized. Please see articles such as Halo 3: ODST and The Beatles: Rock Band for how to format the Reception section.  Additionally the final review in the template to the right does not need both 10/10 and the the star images, use one or the other, and move the reference to the right column to follow suit with the others.
 * "NFS" is ambiguous, and folks who don't play Need For Speed won't know what that means. Spell it out please
 * The rationale for the image File:Needforspeedundercoverporsche911gt3.jpg needs to be updated using current templates and expanded information (see File:Tbrb gamescreen.jpg)
 * Crop the image File:Nfsuc-win-cover.jpg to get rid of the "PC" logo at the top so that it is not platform dependent
 * Things in the infobox (such as platforms, input methods and media) should be alphabetized
 * Alt text should be added to both the cover image and gameplay image
 * Consider moving the gameplay image to the left side of the Development section
 * References should wikilink the publisher (for instance GameTrailers) on the first reference in the section (when there is an article to link to)
 * There are multiple areas of the Gameplay section that have text in parenthesis. Most of these are not necessary for a reader who has not played the game, and if they are they need to be integrated into the prose.
 * The prose is in need of a full copy edit. Consider taking the article to WikiProject Video games/Peer review

Unfortunately I have to Quick-Fail this article. However given some updates feel free to renominate it.

Reviewer: Teancum (talk) 18:24, 2 June 2010 (UTC)