Talk:Nekima Levy Armstrong/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: LuisVilla (talk · contribs) 01:16, 3 March 2017 (UTC)

Thanks for the review, ! I've responded to your concerns below:
 * 1a: I know I tend to write long sentences; I've trimmed some down and hope that even if there are long ones left, they are coherent and not run-on. I've also reorganized and tried to chronologize Career (formerly Teaching and activism) section. Let me know if you think it reads better this way!
 * I think it does; that's subjective of course :)


 * 1b: Removed "preacher" from the lead.
 * Thanks. I wrestled a bit with this one, since it does seem to be part of her self-identification, but it doesn't seem to be reflected in the sources relative to her many other roles.


 * 2c: I've replaced the document, which I now see was not recommended for use as a source in a BLP, with another that cited her birthdate.
 * Great.


 * 4: I added a sentence in. It feels a little crystal ball-ish but if you're okay with it, I am.
 * It isn't ideal? Like I said, I think the paper is trying to do the "both sides said" thing, but feels like we should at least nod towards some controversy if it exists. I expect this will need to be watched as the mayoral campaign develops.


 * 6b: March identified. The second image already had alt text.
 * Weird, don't know why the alt wasn't showing up here.

Thanks again, and let me know if there are any other changes you'd like to see! All the best, Bob Amnertiopsis ∴ChatMe! 01:30, 4 March 2017 (UTC)
 * Looks great - thanks for the hard work! —Luis (talk) 14:43, 4 March 2017 (UTC)