Talk:Nelson Ludington/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 13:12, 5 October 2020 (UTC)

Am reviewing this for the GAN October 2020 Backlog Drive. MWright96 (talk) 13:12, 5 October 2020 (UTC)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Lead

 * Wikilink Upper Peninsula of Michigan

Ancestry

 * "William (b. 1608) and his wife Ellen (b. 1617)" - born 1608 and born 1617 respectively


 * Wikilink New York to New York (state)

Life

 * "Ludington was born January 18, 1818," - born on January 18


 * "His parents were Frederick Ludington and Susannah Griffeth." - Any information on their occupations?


 * "Ludington was the fourth of their sixteen children.[6] The youth received private schooling by tutors for his early education." - consider merging these two sentences together


 * "at a general store at Cold Spring, New York," - in


 * "and received further training in retail business." - where did Ludington receive this training?


 * Wikilink Great Lakes to the relevant article on its first mention


 * Wikilink sawmill on the first mention


 * Think the fourth and fifth paragraphs can be joined together


 * "Royce spelled it as Escanawba. That was entered with the state in 1863 as the legal name for the town." - think these two sentences could be combined


 * "simplifying the spelling. [18]" - the extra space between the period and the citation is not needed


 * "the main docks and lumber yards of the firm were at Milwaukee." - in

- Think merging these portions of text will help matters here
 * "the main docks and lumber yards of the firm were at Milwaukee. It was the main distribution point to places throughout the United States via shipping on the Great Lakes."

Marriage and family

 * "Ludington died January 15, 1883," - died on January 15


 * Perhaps mention he died from a short-term illness

Legacy

 * The two bulletpoints should not exist and the information contained within them be in ordinary prose