Talk:Neuroacanthocytosis

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Some text in this article was originally taken from http://www.ninds.nih.gov/disorders/neuroacanthocytosis/neuroacanthocytosis.htm (public domain)

Naming
In several sources "neuroacanthocytosis" is listed as a group term, not a single illness. For example, at eMedicine. At the same time, OMIM link for some reason points to choreoacanthocytosis. I'm baffled a little.. Some specialist attention is needed, IMHO. -- C opper K ettle  21:59, 18 December 2009 (UTC)

What I came across when I was researching is that Neuroacanthocytosis is a general term and is comprised of those four disease and is sometimes referred to as choreoacanthocytosis or levine-critchley syndrome. I will look into it some more and see if anyone else can help me out! Thanks for your feedback. Saralo16 (talk) 22:13, 20 March 2010 (UTC)

Journal papers


Colin°Talk 22:19, 23 March 2010 (UTC)

Books


Adrian Danek seems to be the expert here. This book would appear to be a must read for this topic. His homepage makes some papers available. Colin°Talk 22:19, 23 March 2010 (UTC)

Peer Review
This is Tyler from Class I just wanted to say that the article was extremely well written. You are obviously know your stuff. The article was hard to read at times simply because I knew nothing about the disease coming in, but it did give me a very good idea about what it was like and how it was passed on. Some of the words you used that were linked could have been explained a little bit more, especially the ones like "Botulinium toxin injection" because there is no article to actually link to find out what they are. I think it would be easy to go in and add half sentences to these which would say something like: ",which are injections that help to temporarily paralyze the nerves in the body." (I am totally guessing on the meaning there based on the word Botox :] ) Anyways the article was very informative and well sourced. Your pictures helped the article and the data and percentages are an easy way to learn about the topic. One thing I was unsure about was that you said that the life expectancy was 5-10 years and then you said it was 10-20. I know these were in two different sections, but I couldn't tell the difference between the claim. I think this article will go far and people wondering about this disease will be happy to find the article on Wikipedia. Good Job. Trod17 (talk) 18:08, 11 April 2010 (UTC)

Hi, This is Kaitlin from class. (I said I'd review your aricle) I think that it is very well written, and very factual and to the point. It almost needs more sentences that aren't just facts to make it easier to read. It would add to the flow and sentence variation would defintely help! I also think that instead of doing a separate section for onset, management, and prognosis for each subset of the disease, it would be better to make them a single paragraph in cases where you don't have a lot of information on each category. Overall, I think you article is really good, and I can tell you have spent a lot of time on it! hersh016 (hersh016) —Preceding undated comment added 17:59, 16 April 2010 (UTC).

Hi, this is Jake from class, sorry it took me so long to review your article, I've been very busy lately. Your article looks VERY good though, it really seems that you know what your talking about. I only have two suggestions to improve the article and the first would be to add an infobox. My article for Roberts Syndrome has one so you can look at that if you need help with that. Second, I would suggest defining more of the complicated terms better, I know what you are talking about but the average person looking at the article for information may have no clue what things such as spiculated shape mean. I did see that you tried to define some of the more complicated terms, which is good but it can be difficult to determine what people do and don't know. Having said that, the article is great!!! MooreSvn (talk) 13:20, 22 April 2010 (UTC)

Comments
Your reviewer Colin had some interesting sources to use, and I suggest you follow up on the one that is web-based (Danek). (as I suggested before) Otherwise, the article is moving forward well. Be careful with your spelling. Be sure to link to the actual articles, and pipe the word usage you want to use. This Nappy gives you Nappy. Otherwise you end up with a lot of redlinks (no article) that actually are there. You might put the two autosomal recessive diseases together, perhaps even under the same heading, or not. But at least sequentially. They have some similarities of transmission. I've moved a few things around, trying to set up the group of diseases up front. Your headers need to follow the wikipedia style: first word is capitalized, subsequent words are not unless they are proper nouns. Auntieruth55 (talk) 03:41, 13 April 2010 (UTC)

Major cleanup needed
This article presents detailed information on several conditions that can cause neuroacanthocytosis. The information is excessive here, and better left to the individual main articles which are more likely to be curated and updated. I suggest removing all the detailed individual disease sections and replacing them with very brief summaries. I will do this soon unless there are objections. Dubbin u &#124; t &#124; c 09:01, 7 May 2016 (UTC)
 * No objections here. We're an encyclopedia. For what it's worth, do you think this was likely the result of a wp:classroom assignment? Many assignments I am aware of require students to add certain quantities of text (even if the article doesn't most need that and would be most be improved by trimming and careful editing). I've even seen students duplicate existing articles, under a separate title. I've seen many examples of students adding off-topic blabbering text to reach said arbitrary directives from their instructors. Ping to User:Ian (Wiki Ed) because I am curious if Wiki Ed makes a practice of cleaning up student-related messes. Also, is Wiki Ed discouraging the kinds of classroom assignments that simply ask for students to expand articles? What kinds of assignments does Wiki Ed tend tend to promote these days (through default text, perhaps)? (Feel free to answer some of that at my talk page, if you don't mind.) Much appreciated. I used to volunteer as an ambassador and have in the past worked with instructors on designing assignments. Best. Biosthmors (talk) pls notify me (i.e. &#123;&#123;U&#125;&#125;) while signing a reply, thx 13:09, 7 May 2016 (UTC)
 * Done! Feedback appreciated, many thanks Dubbin u &#124; t &#124; c 11:57, 8 May 2016 (UTC)