Talk:New Love/GA1

GA Review
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I will this article try since it's recently created.-- Happypillsjr ✉ 02:06, 4 April 2020 (UTC)

Reviewer: Happypillsjr (talk · contribs) 02:06, 4 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Thank you for taking the time to do this review.  Cool Marc  06:00, 4 April 2020 (UTC)
 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:

Infobox

 * Format: Digital download and streaming
 * Release date: 21 August 2015
 * Genre: syth pop
 * ✅ looks perfect.-- Happypillsjr ✉ 03:44, 8 April 2020 (UTC)

Background

 * ✅ looks perfect, no confusion and bad grammars .-- Happypillsjr ✉ 05:05, 10 April 2020 (UTC)

Music Video

 * ✅ looks fine.-- Happypillsjr ✉ 05:05, 10 April 2020 (UTC)

Critic responses
add the song rating chart, if it's opionional for you.-- Happypillsjr ✉ 03:55, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
 * What song rating chart?  Cool Marc  06:24, 10 April 2020 (UTC)

This is one for example from "Lost in Your Light":

-- Happypillsjr</b> <big style="color:Red">✉ 06:30, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Those are called chart positions. "New Love" failed to chart anywhere.  Cool Marc  06:39, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Actually, refering to this which the professional rating: From example from Charli


 * Those are album ratings. Individual songs very rarely get an actual rating by critics, they only write reviews.  Cool Marc  12:23, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Right. I also address the composition section, You could put an audio file for the song.-- <b style="color:hotpink">Happypillsjr</b> <big style="color:Red">✉ 12:50, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Done.  Cool Marc  13:30, 10 April 2020 (UTC)

Overall

 * Don't adress any issues until I finish the review.
 * Thank you. Is there nothing I should address?  Cool Marc  05:58, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Yeah, you should.-- <b style="color:hotpink">Happypillsjr</b> <big style="color:Red">✉ 06:21, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
 * What should I address?  Cool Marc  06:24, 10 April 2020 (UTC)

Sorry I have asked for a second opinion because I don't believe you are cut out to review this. Your comments here are bizarre and you cannot articulate yourself properly.  Cool Marc  15:44, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
 * If that's the way you think, it's fine. I thought I'm doing a good job in this review with music.-- <b style="color:hotpink">Happypillsjr</b> <big style="color:Red">✉ 16:01, 10 April 2020 (UTC)

Second opinion
What is the second opinion about? I thought I could help. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 16:38, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Thank you for your comment! I asked for a second opinion as per above I am not confident that the reviewer is cut out to give this a decent review. If you have a moment to provide a review - that would be of great help to me!  Cool Marc  16:57, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Do you mean a full review? If that's the case I can't help right now. I can give my opinion on subjects or doubts both o you might have, I can't conduct a full review at this point. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 17:02, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
 * As you can see above the reviewer has not given any substantial feedback after a week of bizarre comments and edits. A full review would be beneficial, but the article isn't particularly a long one anyway.  Cool Marc  17:08, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Ok so here goes my two cents on this review. It is not poorly done, it has some valuable comments on it. But you don't need a chart section if the song never charted (pointless). You can add the studios on the personnel section if you want. Be awre of the references because you have stuff like Tidal and Google Play Music as work and they are not. The audio should be on the composition section. On the Music video section, on the Production and release, the last paragrapgh can be merged with the second. I would like to know what a scorebox is doing here? This is just on a first glance. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 17:37, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Thank you, I've changed Google Play and Tidal to publisher as requested and merged the paragraph in the music video section. The reviewer added the scorebox saying I should have one in this article...  Cool Marc  18:33, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
 * No need, songs usually don't have them, that's for albums. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 14:34, 11 April 2020 (UTC)

Comments from Kingsif
I'll be happy to take over this review since the nominator has requested. Kingsif (talk) 21:08, 12 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Sources look fine
 * Good use of media in the article, perhaps the music video screenshot should be moved down to th synopsis part where it's specifically discussed more?
 * Moved.  Cool Marc  09:33, 13 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Infobox satis
 * In the background part, At the time, Lipa went into many failed writing sessions trying to recreate her track "Hotter than Hell" and it was only after she moved on from it that she wrote "New Love".[2] She was unsure of her sound and message as a singer, and thus wrote about this struggle and finding her place in a music industry that "often seems to neither want nor need you." could be rewritten for a more encyclopedic tone.
 * Rewritten. Is it better now?  Cool Marc  09:49, 13 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Release and critical reception section is good
 * The sentence Nodland suggested to direct the clip during a dinner with Lipa, after the singer expressed disappointment for a postponed music video shoot for a different track needs rewriting
 * Rewritten. Please check.  Cool Marc  10:01, 13 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Link treatment to Film treatment
 * Linked.  Cool Marc  09:33, 13 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Presumably the quotation should read 'a day in the life'? ("a life in the day of Dua Lipa")
 * The quote in the source says "like a life in the day of Dua Lipa" should I use Template:Sic and ammend?  Cool Marc  09:33, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Hmm, we can't judge intention because really she did mean a life in the day. Perhaps add a hidden note that the source does indeed say that, and unless it's shown to be a misprint it shouldn't be corrected? Kingsif (talk) 16:41, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Hidden note added.  Cool Marc  16:47, 13 April 2020 (UTC)


 * The sentences While driving with Nodland on Melrose Avenue, Lipa spotted a vacant inflatable slide and filmed a quick scene of her sliding down it before being noticed and charged to use it. The men in white suits were at Hollywood Hills taking pictures and were asked by Lipa on the spot to dance for the video could be somehow connected for better flow
 * I've connected the two sentences. Is it OK now?  Cool Marc  10:11, 13 April 2020 (UTC)


 * The rest looks good
 * on hold Kingsif (talk) 21:08, 12 April 2020 (UTC)
 * thank you for this. I have responded to everything above.  Cool Marc  10:11, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Looks good. Symbol support vote.svg Kingsif (talk) 17:23, 13 April 2020 (UTC)

Comments from Angryjoe1111

 * Lead "Photographer Nicole Nodland directed the music video which is a montage of filtered footage of Lipa in Los Angeles doing activities she enjoys." Could be reworded more concisely. Maybe The music video was directed by photographer Nicole Nodland, which depicts Lipa performing several activities in Los Angeles as a filtered montage. — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 18:02, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Thank you, your suggested sentence is implying that Nodland is a depiction of Lipa... I think the sentence is fine as it is.  Cool Marc  12:35, 14 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Background and composition it was only after this transpired that she wrote "New Love". This can either be written as a separate sentence or concise with the preceding sentence. — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 18:02, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Not sure what you mean here. Lipa was trying to write a song in the style of "Hotter than Hell" and she said it was only after she moved on from trying to recreate "Hotter than Hell" that she wrote "New Love".  Cool Marc  12:35, 14 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Background and composition According to her... This can be rewritten to According to Lipa... — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 18:02, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Done.  Cool Marc  12:35, 14 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Background and composition According to Reliable sources/Noticeboard/Archive 56, I think it is best to attribute Musicnotes.com in the sentence like this: According to the sheet music published at Musicnotes.com by Universal Music Publishing Group, "New Love" is composed in time and the key of A-flat major, with a syncopated pop tempo of 90 beats per minute. The verses have a D♭maj7–E♭ chord progression, while the chorus follows an A♭maj7–D♭maj7–B♭m–E♭ sequence. — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 18:02, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Done.  Cool Marc  12:35, 14 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Background and composition More information can be added to the music sample caption. Maybe you could include the climatic verse leading to the simple chorus? — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 18:02, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Done.  Cool Marc  12:35, 14 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Release and critical reception Recalling her decision to release the single, Lipa said: "When I showed 'New Love' to people, they'd say, 'Oh, I didn't expect that'. I loved that reaction, so I went with it." This could be paraphrased. — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 18:02, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Do you have a suggestion for how this could be paraphrased, it has very specific emphasis that I felt would be better off not paraphrased.  Cool Marc  12:35, 14 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Release and critical reception Some of the reviews do not need to be directly quoted and can be paraphrased, such as Spin and the second quote of Gigwise. — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 18:02, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
 * I don't think they can be accurately paraphrased. I thought they were nice quotes actually... Do you have a suggestion on how they could be paraphrased?  Cool Marc  12:53, 14 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Music video The video was filmed in one day in Los Angeles at locations such as Hollywood Hills and Melrose Avenue. Are these all the locations the video was filmed at? The sentence needs to be written concisely in one sentence or split into two. — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 18:02, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
 * It was filmed at several locations across LA, but Hollywood Hills and Melrose Avenue were the locations that got mentioned in the sources. I trimmed the sentence since the locations are mentioned later in the section anyway.  Cool  Marc  12:53, 14 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Music video After Lipa expressed disappointment for a different track's postponed music video shoot, Nodland suggested to direct the clip for "New Love" during a dinner with the singer. Do you know the track name of the postponed shoot? "During a dinner with the singer" doesn't sound too encyclopedic. Is there another way to rephrase this? — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 18:02, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
 * We don't know the other track's name. I am having trouble with this bit, I rewrote as per previous suggestion of Kingsif, I honestly don't know how to write it better now. What we are trying to say is that Nodland spontaneously offered to direct the music video during a dinner with Lipa where she expressed disappointment about the postponed music video.  Cool Marc  12:53, 14 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Music video Being a low-budget production, to As the video was a low-budget production, — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 18:02, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Rewritten.  Cool Marc  12:53, 14 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Music video Eoin Butler of The Irish Times described it as "like The Big Lebowski, just a little sexier." to Eoin Butler of The Irish Times compared it to a sexier version of The Big Lebowski — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 18:02, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
 * It's more of a description than a comparison.  Cool Marc  12:53, 14 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Live performances Lipa performed "New Love" live for the first time... to Lipa debuted the song's live performance... — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 18:02, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
 * I rewrote it as Lipa gave her first live performance of "New Love" which sounds better to me.  Cool Marc  12:55, 14 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Live performances Are there any specific details that can be included about any of her other performances? — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 18:02, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Unfortunately nothing, I did a lot of research but nothing more than what is already included.  Cool Marc  12:53, 14 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Track listing I think it would look more appealing if the formats are in bold. Both citations have a misspelled title and no publisher name. — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 18:02, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Done.  Cool Marc  12:53, 14 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Personnel I would personally place the credit adaptation sentence on top of the section as it introduces the personnel. — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 18:02, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
 * WP:CITEFOOT suggests it should be at the end. it is usually sufficient to add the citation to the end of the clause, sentence, or paragraph, so long as it's clear which source supports which part of the text.  Cool Marc  13:03, 14 April 2020 (UTC)

I hope that all these comments would help in the GA review. Good luck! — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 18:02, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Thank you for your comments! :-) I have responded above.  Cool Marc  13:03, 14 April 2020 (UTC)