Talk:New York State Route 383/GA1

GA Review
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Comments: I am placing the article on hold Dough4872 (talk) 00:47, 31 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) "Monroe and Livingston Counties", counties should be in lowercase here.
 * This topic is currently being debated at the US 41 in MI FAC. I don't know which is right, but I can't find any guidance in the MOS either way. For the time being, I have left it as it was.
 * 1) "before it ultimately enters open fields once again", do not need the word ultimately.
 * Reworded.
 * 1) In the sentence "In Chili, NY 383 begins to run along the western bank of the Genesee River ahead of an intersection with NY 252." change "ahead of" to "before".
 * Upon re-reading that piece, the original didn't make much sense so I rewrote much of that section.
 * 1) "CSX Transportation West Shore Subdivision": do not have two wikilinks together. Instead say "CSX Transportation's West Shore Subdivision".
 * Reworded sentence to further distance them.
 * 1) "the Genesee" sounds colliqual.
 * Changed to "the river".
 * 1) When describing progression of route, do not use "then".
 * Eliminated all but one in the route description, where I couldn't think of any wording that wouldn't make the sentence choppy.
 * 1) The sentence "NY 383 continues north on Plymouth Avenue through densely populated sections of the city to Ford Street, then shifts eastward to Exchange Boulevard." sounds awkward.
 * Heh, that's the sentence I couldn't reword above. =) Hmm...I thought of a better wording just now, so I rewrote it, eliminating the last RD use of "then" as well.
 * 1) In phrase "On Exchange Boulevard, Route 383 follows the Genesee's west bank under the Troup-Howell Bridge", change "on" to "along".
 * Like above, the original didn't make much sense when I re-read it, especially in conjunction with the rewritten sentence relating to Ford Street. I've rewritten most of that sentence.
 * 1) In History section, do not link terms already linked in route description.
 * I'm of the understanding that this practice is fine. The one item on WP:OVERLINK that I note is "Avoiding duplicate links in the same section of an article is generally a safe rule of thumb," and as far as I'm aware this article complies with that suggestion.
 * 1) "Between the hamlet of Mumford and Scottsville": "hamlet" should be pluralized.
 * Oops. =) Fixed.
 * 1) "overlapped NY 35". Again, do not have two wikilinks together, perhaps used "ran concurrent with NY 35".
 * Fixed.
 * 1) "In 1938, U.S. Route 20 was rerouted between Buffalo and Avon to follow NY 35.": Rephrase to say "In 1938, U.S. Route 20 was rerouted to follow NY 35 between Buffalo and Avon."
 * That does sound much better. Fixed.
 * 1) If known, street names should be added to the Major intersections table.
 * Added the ones used at some point in the article to the junction list.


 * That was a very good review, much better than ones I've seen on GAN lately. Thanks! –  T M F 04:26, 31 May 2009 (UTC)
 * Passing. Dough4872 (talk) 14:15, 31 May 2009 (UTC)