Talk:New Zealand literature/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Pax85 (talk · contribs) 06:32, 22 September 2021 (UTC)

Greetings! I plan on reviewing the article over the next week or so. I also tend to do a bit of copy editing along the way. If you have any questions, feel free to ping me any time. As I complete each section, I will change the yellow "in progress" indicator to either on hold, pass , or fail. - Pax  Verbum  06:32, 22 September 2021 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Pass or Fail:
 * 1) Is it well written?
 * A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
 * The article is well-written. I performed some light copy edits for flow, concise language, consistent formatting, and other minor issues. - Pax  Verbum  05:57, 29 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Need to double-check the years for the journal The Triad - I assume it is supposed to say 1883?  Pax  Verbum  05:57, 29 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Hah, yes, 1893; fixed! Was there anything else you were going to say about the lead? (you mentioned below you had some comments on the content?) Cheers, Chocmilk03 (talk) 06:58, 29 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Ah yes, thank you for that reminder! I will add those comments in a jiffy. - Pax  Verbum  17:02, 29 September 2021 (UTC)
 * B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
 * Lead: Brief, and summarizes the topic well, with an appropriate length compared to the rest of the article. I do have some comments on the particular content in the lead, but I will address those in 1a.- Pax  Verbum  06:00, 24 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Further lead comments: I know I said I would put these above, but I think they are better here. Overall, I think the lead is a good summary, but the more I reflect on it after spending some more time with the article, I do believe the concluding sentence/paragraph can use a bit of expansion, just a sentence or two I think. The first paragraph summarizes well the history of NZ lit., leaving the summary of the modern state of NZ lit. to the second paragraph. Good. That said, I think a general comment or two about what those writers now focus on might be helpful. Even better, perhaps a comment or two on the rise of the NZ awards and journals, which aren't mentioned in the lead at all, but do have sizeable sections in the article itself.
 * Totally agree, I struggled a lot with the lead to be honest so not surprised it isn't quite there yet! I've had a go at expanding; it's difficult because I don't want to focus too much unduly on any specific writers/areas and it really is such a broad topic... but I've added an initial sentence which I hope now gives a better context. Let me know your thoughts? Cheers, Chocmilk03 (talk) 21:21, 30 September 2021 (UTC)
 * I just took a look at the changes, and I think that's a terrific addition! I'm mobile right now, so in a few hours I'll go ahead and wrap up this GA when I'm back at a computer. :) - Pax  Verbum  23:42, 30 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Layout: Comparing it to other literature articles, the layout is clear and logical.- Pax  Verbum  06:00, 24 September 2021 (UTC)
 * No other significant MOS issues apparent. Formatting and layout consistent throughout the article. Language use (NZ English) is consistent. - Pax  Verbum  21:03, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
 * 1) Is it verifiable with no original research?
 * A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
 * There is indeed a list of references that appears quite extensive, with consistent formatting of the references themselves. That said, I believe in this article the "Notes" section should be reserved for explanatory footnotes; if there are none, then that's OK - no need to list that section. Then the 83 inline citations should be listed in another section called "References", and finally the four books listed in a "Bibliography" or "Further reading" section. A decent example of this is the British literature article. Another good example is American literature, although it is done a bit differently there, combining the inline citations and explanatory notes into one section. While "Notes" is a perfectly acceptable title for this section according to the MOS, I believe for this article, the more common title of "References" should be used for this section, particularly for clarity: listing only the four books under "References" gives the impression that those are the only references when that is clearly not the case. If you prefer to use "Notes" then the section titled "References" should definitely be renamed to avoid confusion for readers and future editors. - Pax  Verbum  05:29, 24 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Makes perfect sense, thanks. I've amended to 'References' and 'Bibliography' respectively and I think I prefer that as well. Cheers, Chocmilk03 (talk) 08:42, 24 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Looks good! My project for tonight (for me, in about two hours, local time) will be going through all the sources for 2b. Then tomorrow and over the next couple days, I'll go through the body of the article itself. - Pax  Verbum  01:42, 26 September 2021 (UTC)
 * B. All in-line citations are from reliable sources, including those for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons&mdash;science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines:
 * Refs. 9, 19, 27, and 36 list A. H. McLintock as the author when he is actually the editor. - Pax  Verbum  19:09, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks for catching that, sorted! Noted the in-use tag too so I'll hold off on any other edits. Cheers, Chocmilk03 (talk) 21:31, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Looks good! We had a bit of an edit conflict when you corrected the sources; hopefully I was able to straighten everything out with your changes and mine! - Pax  Verbum  05:57, 29 September 2021 (UTC)
 * A good variety of sources, both secondary and appropriate primary sources. The only thing I would note here is that a lot of the sources come from one place, the Encyclopedia of New Zealand, hosted by the government. That's not a problem for this reviewer for GA status since the articles have many different authors and everything seems to be unbiased, but a larger selection (or using citations from the sources of those articles) might be helpful moving forward. Overall, the Encyclopedia of NZ seems to be a wonderful resource! - Pax  Verbum  19:09, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks! Will keep that in mind. It's definitely a great resource, but agree that more diversity in sources could be an additional improvement. :) Chocmilk03 (talk) 21:31, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
 * C. It contains no original research:
 * Looks good to me. Everything is properly sourced and no independent conclusions are drawn. - Pax  Verbum  05:57, 29 September 2021 (UTC)
 * D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
 * No copyright violations or plagiarism apparent, although just a heads up: there are a couple of places where the phrasing is very similar to outside sources. It's not an issue in the article, but it's something to be aware of, that as we are writing, sometimes similar phrases still sneak themselves into the article. Again, to be clear, not an issue here, but something to watch for in the future. - Pax  Verbum  05:40, 24 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks, I will definitely try to be more conscious of this! Cheers, Chocmilk03 (talk) 08:42, 24 September 2021 (UTC)
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
 * Comparing to other literature articles and my own personal (although limited) familiarity with NZ, the article seems to address the main topics well. - Pax  Verbum  05:57, 29 September 2021 (UTC)
 * It might be helpful for the reader to define "Pasifika" in the modern literature section, even if as a parenthetical or a short clause. For example: "Notable Pasifika writers with connections to New Zealand include..." - Pax  Verbum  05:57, 29 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks, good suggestion. Have amended in the article, is that what you were thinking? Chocmilk03 (talk) 06:58, 29 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Looks good to me! -  Pax  Verbum  17:04, 29 September 2021 (UTC)
 * B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
 * The article definitely stays on top and does not unnecessarily stray. Towards the end, there are quite a few opportunities (red links) to start new articles. - Pax  Verbum  05:57, 29 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Absolutely. I am working on one of them at the moment :) Chocmilk03 (talk) 06:58, 29 September 2021 (UTC)
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
 * In the "Maoriland" section: "In 1901, William Satchell launched a magazine called The Maorilander, and the leftwing labour journal..." - You might consider using the term "liberal-leaning" rather than leftwing, or perhaps another term. Leftwing and rightwing tend to be be quite charged, especially in certain parts of the world. - Pax  Verbum  21:03, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Hmm, I think "leftwing" is accurate even in the politically charged context, and "liberal-leaning" would be an understatement. The magazine is/was generally described as socialist and radical. I've added another source with more details about it; see if you agree? Chocmilk03 (talk) 06:58, 29 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Thank you for that. Yes, I would agree. -  Pax  Verbum  17:07, 29 September 2021 (UTC)
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
 * Article seems stable. No ongoing edit wars and doesn't seem to be in a major state of construction.
 * 1) Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * With the exception of the two noted below, all images seem to have the appropriate licensing and status.
 * The Katherine Mansfield image is tagged as public domain in its country of origin, but a US public domain tag still needs to be added to the file on Commons. If I am understanding the requirements correctly, it needs a PD tag both for the country of origin and for the US in order to be used.
 * Same issue with the New Zealand Illustrated cover: it is tagged as PD in NZ, but it appears to need a PD tag for the US as well.
 * Thanks, I have reviewed those two images and added the appropriate US PD tags (I wasn't aware of that requirement, so good to know!). Both images are old enough (1919 & 1905) that they were public domain in NZ well before the 1 January 1996 URAA date. Cheers, Chocmilk03 (talk) 22:24, 22 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Looks good! - Pax  Verbum  05:02, 24 September 2021 (UTC)
 * B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * A nice selection of images that accompany the main topic well. On my screen, the size and position seem fine. - Pax  Verbum  05:02, 24 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Placing on hold as we work out the last few bits (whether they are corrections or discussions). Once that's done, I see no issue with this one being promoted! - Pax  Verbum  05:57, 29 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Congratulations! Time to promote this to Good Article status! This article was well-written and informative. As someone with family connections to NZ, it was a true joy to get another taste of all things Kiwi. I was also able to add a few books to my "to-read" list. Thanks again and all the best! Cheers! - Pax  Verbum  06:27, 1 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Woohoo! Thanks so much!! Really grateful for your helpful comments & work on the article. Enjoy the books! :) Cheers, Chocmilk03 (talk) 21:02, 1 October 2021 (UTC)