Talk:Newcastle United F.C./GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Casliber (talk · contribs) 20:54, 3 May 2011 (UTC)

Howay then, let's go. I'll make staightforward copyedits as I go and jot queries below. Casliber (talk · contribs) 20:54, 3 May 2011 (UTC)


 * Better looking not to use bold text in the "History" section. Italics can be used sometimes to emphasise word-as-word.


 * lead focuses too much on recentism. I'd mention the successful period in the 1910s here, and probably trim off this bit about the premier league "the inaugural 1992–93 season and the 2009–10 season"


 *  That season Frank Watt became secretary of the club with the aim of bringing the team success. - erm, isn't that the aim of every manager/secretary/owner/captain etc.... --> I'd merge into the next sentence so:

" That season Frank Watt became secretary of the club, and he was instrumental in promotion to the First Division for the 1898–99 season. However, they lost their first game 4–2 at home to Wolves and finished their first season in 13th place."


 *  Striker Malcolm Macdonald was bought by Harvey for a club record fee in the summer of 1971. - awww, can't leave me hanging like that, can someone slip in the pricetag?

Otherwise looking pretty good - now it is 1am here (Oz) and I need to sleep. Back tomorrer. Casliber (talk · contribs) 15:10, 10 May 2011 (UTC)

let me think...will have another copyedit run over.....Casliber (talk · contribs) 04:22, 11 May 2011 (UTC)

1. Well written?:
 * Prose quality:
 * Manual of Style compliance:

2. Factually accurate and verifiable?:
 * References to sources:
 * Citations to reliable sources, where required:
 * No original research:

3. Broad in coverage?:
 * Major aspects:
 * Focused:

4. Reflects a neutral point of view?:
 * Fair representation without bias:

5. Reasonably stable?
 * No edit wars, etc. (Vandalism does not count against GA):

6. Illustrated by images, when possible and appropriate?:
 * Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

Overall:
 * Pass or Fail: I think it could do with some more prose polish, but is ok for GA. I was musing on the recent bit with all the managers coming and going...but then this reflects...well, managers coming and going....so, overall this gets over the line. Casliber (talk · contribs) 05:26, 11 May 2011 (UTC)