Talk:Newport and Wickford Railroad and Steamboat Company/GA1

GA Review
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Nominator: 00:36, 1 May 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: LunaEatsTuna (talk · contribs) 04:48, 23 May 2024 (UTC)

I will review this. Template:LunaEatsTunaSig (talk), posted at 04:48, 23 May 2024 (UTC)


 * Done; over to you! Template:LunaEatsTunaSig  (talk), posted at 15:56, 25 May 2024 (UTC)


 * Oh, also, I just noticed a user left a message on this article's talk page regarding new sources they found. :) Template:LunaEatsTunaSig  (talk), posted at 15:59, 25 May 2024 (UTC)
 * Yes, there was a discussion on my user talk page about the source, where I stated my belief that the clear majority of sources agree on 3.5 miles, so I did not feel comfortable changing the number based on just one source.
 * Ah I see – thank you for clearing that up. are you finished with the editing? (I forgot to ask you to ping me once you finished). :3  ❧ LunaEatsTuna  (talk), writing gibberish since 2017 – posted at 20:34, 5 June 2024 (UTC)
 * I am done editing for the moment, do let me know if you have any further comments or suggestions or want to follow up on any existing review items. Trainsandotherthings (talk) 17:52, 6 June 2024 (UTC)
 * Sorry for the wait – it looks great now! I really love the image additions, BTW. Pass. ❧ LunaEatsTuna  (talk), staying at Hotel Wikipedia since 2017 – posted at 05:39, 10 June 2024 (UTC)

Da review:
 * Formation and construction
 * "chased out of town" – should probably be changed per WP:IDIOM, unless they were chased out of the actual town surrounding Wickford, in which case specify North Kingstown.
 * The source says "Wickford turned out and fought it literally, the surveyors having been driven out of town by farmers armed with guns". I don't think the writing here is an idiom, I was paraphrasing the source.
 * "ship to Newport from west of" – should it not be "the west of"?
 * I think this is grammatically correct as written - by west of Rhode Island I meant travelers predominantly from NYC.
 * "An all-rail trip meant traveling via" – I would reword this to avoid repetition with the prior sentence's "meant traveling".
 * I decided to reword the previous sentence instead, replacing traveling with sailing.
 * I would combine the third and fourth paragraphs since they are both short but also definitely related enough.
 * Sure, combined.
 * Independent operations
 * "In addition to passenger service, the railroad also provided freight service to Wickford's sole mill and several others along its route, plus mail to and from Newport" – try and reword "several others" since it sounds awkward in this sentence (like it might be referring to other mills, although it says Wickford only has one).
 * "included a grand total" > "included a total" – adding grand is not really necessary.
 * Fair enough. Done.
 * Takeover by the New Haven and abandonment
 * "its fares to match its competition" – pedantic but I would do "its fares to match the competition" here since it sounds better than using its in such close succession.
 * That's reasonable, changed as suggested.
 * I normally dislike doing this but I would start the second paragraph with "However, the Newport and Wickford's financial issues continued ..." to better connect it to the previous paragraph's final sentence.
 * I'm not sure this connects with that sentence, as the end of the paragraph states the company entered receivership, which is a negative event.
 * "at the last minute" – I presume this is idiomatic which, if so, I would rephrase since it could be interpreted as having been at the actual last minute (unless it was? In which case maybe rephrase it to avoid confusion with the idiom).
 * This is a figure of speech, yes. I rewrote the sentence and added a bit more information.
 * How about something like "The tracks to the dock at Wickford Landing were subsequently abandoned in 1938, with the remainder of the line retained as a freight branch serving local industries" in order to improve the flow?
 * That works for me. Changed.
 * Probably subjective, but I would recommend "still visible as of 2012" to be a bit more specific.
 * I added some specifics and mention of a train car from the railroad that has been preserved at a museum in Connecticut.
 * Station listing
 * In the wikitable, the Comments row leaves a lot of whitespace; how about a footnote next to Newport instead?
 * I'd prefer not to remove the comments or move them elsewhere; I did add a comment to the table so it's more populated now.
 * Spotcheck
 * All good, passes checks I did on refs 1, 2, 8, 13 and 17.