Talk:Newton Lower Falls Branch/GA1

GA Review
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Nominator: 06:18, 30 April 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Steelkamp (talk · contribs) 04:45, 28 June 2024 (UTC)

Ok, I'll take this review. Steelkamp (talk) 04:45, 28 June 2024 (UTC)

Well written
Lead
 * I think Massachusetts should be linked, as there are no sea of blue issues there.
 * 21st-century proposals should be reworded to avoid starting a sentence with a figure.
 * 21st-century proposals should be reworded to avoid starting a sentence with a figure.

Route
 * ...in just five minutes. I would change to ...in five minutes as per Manual of Style/Words to watch.

Early history
 * It had cost $39,050 to build. Recommend changing to It cost $39,050 to build.
 * What is the "Newton Circuit"?
 * ✅ Added some wikilinks to clarify.
 * ...while Lower Falls Branch service was reduced to Riverside–Lower Falls shuttle trains. I think this would be clearer as ...while Lower Falls Branch service was reduced to shuttle trains to Riverside.
 * ✅ I prefer to say "between X and Y" rather than "to X" unless a service is unidirectional.
 * ✅ I prefer to say "between X and Y" rather than "to X" unless a service is unidirectional.

Electrification
 * The single electric railcar... Replace with A single electric railcar... because the railcar is not already mentioned.
 * State legislature could link to Massachusetts General Court.
 * State legislature could link to Massachusetts General Court.

Closure
 * Just to be clear, I recommend changing Newton–Framingham route to Newton–Framingham streetcar route.
 * Service was reduced to 7+1⁄2 round trips at that time. Should that be Service was reduced to 7+1⁄2 round trips per day at that time.?
 * Change "1950–1951" to "1950–51" for consistency with other dates in the article.
 * It included a deed restriction disallowed the right-of-way from being used as "a transportation, communication, electrical or other corridor or right of way". This should be changed to It included a deed restriction that disallowed the right-of-way from being used as "a transportation, communication, electrical or other corridor or right of way".
 * Change "1950–1951" to "1950–51" for consistency with other dates in the article.
 * It included a deed restriction disallowed the right-of-way from being used as "a transportation, communication, electrical or other corridor or right of way". This should be changed to It included a deed restriction that disallowed the right-of-way from being used as "a transportation, communication, electrical or other corridor or right of way".
 * It included a deed restriction disallowed the right-of-way from being used as "a transportation, communication, electrical or other corridor or right of way". This should be changed to It included a deed restriction that disallowed the right-of-way from being used as "a transportation, communication, electrical or other corridor or right of way".

Rail trail and litigation
 * The STB initialism is not defined before being used.

Verifiable with no original research
References spotchecked: 12, 30, 34, 37, 59, 67, 68, 71. No issues found.

General

 * Do you know why the map link is below the categories? Is that a glitch?
 * The "KML file" link created by Attached KML? That appears normally to me on both desktop Chrome and mobile Firefox. Pi.1415926535 (talk) 23:09, 28 June 2024 (UTC)
 * Yes, the KML link. For me, its below the categories at the bottom of the page on desktop Chrome and Firefox and mobile Safari. Steelkamp (talk) 02:14, 29 June 2024 (UTC)

Regardless of the above map glitch, I'm going to pass this review. Congratulations :) Steelkamp (talk) 02:14, 29 June 2024 (UTC)