Talk:Ngo Dinh Diem presidential visit to Australia/GA1

GA Review
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I'll be reviewing this article shortly. Ealdgyth - Talk 17:49, 8 March 2009 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for criteria)

Specific concerns
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS):
 * just a few prose glitches
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Lead: "... and other liberal countries that same year." Liberal? Suggest cutting that unless the source is very specific.
 * "A member of Vietnam's Catholic minority, Diem had pursued discriminatory policies towards his co-religionists; he exempted the Catholic Church from land reform, gave them more aid and promotions, and allowed Catholic paramilitaries to attack Buddhists." The "pursued discriminatory policies" implies that he pursued policies that were bad for the Catholics. Suggest rewording, perhaps "A member of Vietnam's Catholic minority, Diem pursued policies favoring his co-religionists; he exempted the Catholic Church from land reform, gave them more aid and promotions, and allowed Catholic paramilitaries to attack Buddhists."
 * Meetings and ceremonies: Lots of short one and two sentence paragraphs here, suggest combining a few to give a better flow to the prose.
 * Meetings: YOu need to mention WHEN the visit was in this section. It's mentioned in the lead, but never actually mentioned in the body until the third paragraph. Suggest rewriting the first three paragraphs to one paragraph "On 2 September, Diem arrived in Canberra, Australia's capital, and was photographed in The Age and described as a "small but striking figure in a royal blue silk frock coat, long white trousers and black mandarin hat". He was greeted by the Governor-General of Australia Sir William Slim and the Prime Minister of Australia Robert Menzies. He was given a 21-gun salute and a guard of honour by the Royal Australian Air Force, while fighter jets flew above him. Diem's visit was the first by a foreign incumbent head of state to Australia, and followed earlier visits by him to the United States and other anti-communist Asian countries such as Thailand and South Korea. The magnitude of the ceremonial welcome accorded to Diem was unseen since the visit in 1954 by Queen Elizabeth II. According to military historian Peter Edwards, a historian at the Australian War Memorial specialising in the Vietnam War, "Everywhere he was feted as a man of courage, faith and vision", and he noted that Diem was received with "more ceremony and pageantry" than the visit of Queen Elizabeth II in 1954."
 * Suggest unlinking the 1957 date in Media reception.
 * I've put the article on hold for seven days to allow folks to address the issues I've brought up. Feel free to contact me on my talk page, or here with any concerns, and let me know one of those places when the issues have been addressed. If I may suggest that you strike out, check mark, or otherwise mark the items I've detailed, that will make it possible for me to see what's been addressed, and you can keep track of what's been done and what still needs to be worked on. Ealdgyth - Talk 18:09, 8 March 2009 (UTC)