Talk:Nick Goiran

Comments
Not a formal review, just comments.


 * The article generally has the problem of most politician articles - it's just not very cohesive.
 * The "early life and career" section is pretty bare and strangely worded, largely due to relying on his equally strangely-worded website. "18 months later, he became an equity partner" is an odd fragment because it's not an achievement like becoming a barrister, you become an equity partner of a firm, and what that firm is is fairly crucial context. It's also not really clear what he means by consultant.
 * There's no reference to his family - he wasn't just a former member of the CDP, his family basically was the WA CDP. The sources on this are a little barer than I'd expect, but there's still plenty to at least mention something.
 * The first eight years of his political career is pretty bare.
 * His current powerbroker role is just introduced out of the blue with a passing mention in a news story verifying that he'd attained that status "by 2016" and not much about how he got there or what he was doing before 2021. He's a fairly controversial figure so it's not like the material's not there, it just needs a more thorough reworking than has happened so far.
 * There's an entire paragraph for his motion on Legislative Council committees. The source mentions Labor's response being that it just led to a Liberal replacing a crossbencher as chair of that committee (as well as a Liberal chairing another committee that would seem to be not terribly important). I'm not convinced this warrants the weight it gets.
 * The section about the Liberal Reform Coalition is awkwardly worded - it introduces the "Liberal Reform Coalition" like we're supposed to know who they are (and then explains it after the fact).
 * The timeline around the last two paragraphs is confusing, because most of the last paragraph seems to pre-date the end of the second last paragraph, even though the last paragraph is on the same subject as the start of the last paragraph. It's also not clear whether the investigation and the critical report are related, or if the former was affected by the legal settlement.
 * The "political views" section seems pretty good apart from the sex work section, which mischaracterises both the doomed bill that he was criticising (which wasn't anything close to decriminalisation as it is ordinarily understood in relation to sex work; reading a press release from the time it actually seems very similar to Christian Porter's reform attempt years later) and his alternative (using a spin description often used by its proponents, but which at best hotly disputed and so not NPOV). The Drover&#39;s Wife (talk) 05:34, 19 May 2022 (UTC)