Talk:Nihil/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Status (talk · contribs) 19:06, 15 July 2012 (UTC)


 * 2 disambiguation links

Lead

 * Seems like it could be expanded on a bit more.

Background

 * KMFDM had finished their "Angstfest" tour in support of Angst in 1994 --> KMFDM had finished their Angstfest tour in support of Angst in 1994.
 * Background doesn't seem to flow very well; just reads as a bunch of facts put together. Try fluffing it out a bit.

Production

 * Doesn't seem like "Nihil is one of only two KMFDM studio albums (Opium being the other) that does not feature cover artwork by pop-artist Brute!. Instead, the cover was designed by Rieflin's wife Francesca Sundsten." belongs in a production section. Maybe if it was retitled to "production and artwork". Additionally, the last sentence is unsourced.

Release

 * The bit rate of the sample needs to be reduced to around 54, per the sample guidelines.

Critical reception

 * Nihil received very favorable reviews. --> Nihil received very favorable reviews from music critics.
 * No --> number
 * called --> labelled

Second lookthrough

 * The background section is for information about what happened before the production of the album. So the information about the album cover is irrelevant here. I think release would be the best place to put it. Also, It should probably be retitled "background and development".
 * A handful of other studio musicians were brought in to help in a very limited capacity. --> Unsourced
 * Nihil is one of only two KMFDM studio albums (Opium being the other) that does not feature cover artwork by pop-artist Brute!. and The band would return to using Brute!'s work on the next album, Xtort. --> Need sources
 * Everything else looks good to me; I'm just not 100% happy on the whole background part of the article.


 * I added sources for Brute! and the horn players, and moved the artwork to the release section. I also added some more background information, but I don't feel like there's really any information on "development" that would necessitate renaming the section.  Anything like that is in the next section.  What do you think? —Torchiest talkedits 03:51, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
 * Looks better. I still just feel like something is missing. As someone who isn't familiar with the group, I'm just not getting the full picture, if you know what I mean. Are Sascha Konietzko and En Esch guitarists for the band? It might bring a little more light to "with a live act that sometimes had four guitarists playing at once". Statυs  (talk) 03:59, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
 * Okay, I understand what you're saying now. As someone who has been a fan for going on twenty years, it's easy to take a lot of information for granted.  I'll do some digging and get some more information in there. —Torchiest talkedits 04:05, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
 * Haha, yes, exactly. I suggest you do something like that for all these types of articles. As WP:ALBUMS states: "It should not be assumed that the reader is familiar with the artist's history and/or previously released albums." Statυs  (talk) 04:13, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
 * Okay, I think I've clarified everyone's roles in the band at this point, and added a little more history. Is it making sense to the layman now? :) —Torchiest talkedits 04:27, 20 July 2012 (UTC)


 * Much better. I now feel confident in passing the article. Great work! Statυs  (talk) 04:34, 20 July 2012 (UTC)