Talk:Nikolai Tikhonov/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Lord Roem (talk) 03:21, 20 January 2011 (UTC)
 * I will be reviewing this article. Cheers, Lord Roem (talk) 03:21, 20 January 2011 (UTC)

Section by section review
Lead
 * Done Confusing: "As many like him Tikhonov climbed up the Soviet hierarchy through the 'industrial ladder'; by 1963 he had become Deputy Chairman of the Gosplan."
 * GDone rammar issue + change the 1963 office to a broader statement of his climb. "From peasant to Vice Premier" as an example.
 * Besides that, good!

Early life and career Done *First sentence of last paragraph, change to "When Alexi Kosygin, the then current First Deputy, was on sick leave..."
 * Done I'm unsure of the policy on this, but maybe remove the red links.
 * Done Comma after '1930 to 1941'
 * Done That same sentence is a run-on
 * Done "that he met" in first sentence of first paragraph
 * Why? Change link of All-Union Communists to labeling it 'Bolshevik' Party for clarity sake.
 * The party wasn't known as the Bolshevik Party in the 1920s, 1930s and other decades. The official name of the party was the All-Union Communist Party, I can change it to Communist Party if that term is better. Is it? --TIAYN (talk) 18:43, 21 January 2011 (UTC)
 * Its fine as it is. Sorry. It looked like you had forgot to put a | in an internal link since it had part of the name in parenthesis. -- Lord Roem (talk) 07:03, 22 January 2011 (UTC)
 * Done Comma after 'As a director'
 * Done Call 'Great Patriotic War' what it is - WWII.
 * Done Last sentence of second paragraph - change to "...became a member of the Central Committee."
 * Done "...was elected a candidate member of the..."

Premiership (1980-85) Later life and death (1985-97)
 * Done Need cite for "not producing enough grain".
 * Done Need cite for "Tikhonov acknowledged..." sentence's claim
 * Working Complete a copyedit for this section. Lots of commas missing.
 * Done Last sentence here seems extraneous - suggesting removal.
 * Maybe put a picture here to make it easier to read the long block of text.
 * There are no pictures of him, and there are nearly no free pictures from this period. None of Soviet officials related to Tikhonov in any major way. --TIAYN (talk) 18:43, 21 January 2011 (UTC)
 * Done Need a cite to claim that his resignation was "forced"
 * Yes Is "Secretaryship" a word?
 * It is used on the List of leaders of the Soviet Union which passed WP:FL. --TIAYN (talk) 18:43, 21 January 2011 (UTC)
 * In that case keep it. :) -- Lord Roem (talk) 07:03, 22 January 2011 (UTC)
 * Done The view was strengthened - fix in 2nd sentence.
 * Done Need cite for the 'hermit' quote.
 * Done Comma after "According to Time magazine..."
 * Done Change title of section to "Later life and death". Removing the years are key because of the later references to things built in his honor; all of which happened after he died.

Refs/Biblio.
 * Done The Zemtsov source has spacing issues between the title of the book and the publisher name.

Concluding Thoughts
 * Article copyedit is recommended.
 * I've requested a copyedit from the Guild of Copy Editors; is it okay to put this article on hold until a outside editor decides to copyedit the article? --TIAYN (talk) 10:21, 22 January 2011 (UTC)
 * I will hold this open until that process is done. I'll change the status to hold later today (when I'm not in a rush). -- Lord Roem (talk) 12:58, 22 January 2011 (UTC)
 * Lots of sentences seem to run-on.

You have a week's time to resolve the concerns before a decision on promotion will be made. Best regards, Lord Roem (talk) 18:02, 21 January 2011 (UTC)
 * Good work so far. :-) Lord Roem (talk) 07:03, 22 January 2011 (UTC)


 * I just read through the article again. Much better and greater clarity! :) Would you like me to now reassess it for promotion or are you still working on it? Lord Roem (talk) 17:55, 23 January 2011 (UTC)
 * Thanks! :D I'm more or less finished, if you feel it meets the GA criteria please reassess it! As you already know I'm waiting for the Guild of Copyeditors to copyedit this article; nothing more! --TIAYN (talk) 18:22, 23 January 2011 (UTC)
 * Then if it's all right with you, I'll just wait for one of them to go over it. That way I can look over the best version of the article. Note that I have alot of stuff on my watchlist, so please feel free to post a note on my talk page if I don't realize the copyedit has happened. Cheers, Lord Roem (talk) 18:34, 23 January 2011 (UTC)