Talk:Nina Derwael/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Edwininlondon (talk · contribs) 21:29, 12 June 2022 (UTC)

Hi Riley1012, I'm happy to review this in the next few days. I notice a lack of images. I assume you tried to find some but none with suitable rights exist? Edwininlondon (talk) 21:29, 12 June 2022 (UTC)
 * Hi, thanks for the review. Unfortunately, there are no images available. -Riley1012 (talk) 00:18, 18 June 2022 (UTC)

Prose
Although not riveting, the text does do the important things (neutral point of view, to the point). Coverage is good. Just some comments:
 * normally there are no references in the lead. Is there a reason you have [1]?
 * [1] is the reference for the date of birth per WP:DOB
 * My interpretation of MOS:LEADCITE: only if the claim is likely to be challenged is a ref in the lead needed. I don't think that is the case here, am I right? The Early life section has the birthdate, sourced, so no need in the lead.
 * Makes sense to me, I've removed the source from the lead. -Riley1012 (talk) 02:05, 22 June 2022 (UTC)
 * Belgian --> the guideline is not to make country names links
 * She is also the 2019 European Games champion on the balance beam as well as --> I'd put a comma before as well as
 * all-around champion --> is there a good destination for this to be a link?
 * ✅ added
 * At the 2020 Olympics, she led team Belgium to their first-ever team final where they finished eighth --> given that the previous sentence was about Olympics in general and not gymnastics, I think this sentence needs a gymnastics somewhere
 * the word "also" appears 3 times in the lead. In general it is hardly ever needed.
 * is a former football player --> add professional and a link
 * Added professional. Nico Derwael does not have a page on the English Wikipedia. Should I add Nico Derwael?
 * link all the sports
 * She began gymnastics --> should be a link and is there a reason why this is not artistic gymnastics, like in the lead?
 * ✅ no reason, it's fixed now
 * finished eighth in the all-around --> all-around should either be a link or explained
 * ✅ link added
 * eighth in the uneven bars event final --> uneven bars should be a link (see MOS:LINK
 * uneven bars, balance beam --> link balance beam
 * She represented Belgium at the 2016 Summer Olympics --> may I suggest you add where these were held?
 * ✅, I added it for 2020 Olympics too
 * At the 2016 Games, did she do anything at the uneven bars individual event?
 * ✅ She was the third reserve for the final. I added that information.
 * overall, in the whole article, there are 16 cases of "then". Sometimes they are too close to each other (2017: First World medal has 5). See if you can rephrase or simply drop it.
 * (Stalder to Tkatchev with 1/2 turn) --> any links here would help the user
 * During the uneven bars final, Derwael scored 15.233, earning the gold medal and defending her World title on the uneven bars --> that's twice "uneven bars". One of them should suffice.
 * on the third season Belgium's Dancing with the Stars --> I suspect there is an "of" needed before Belgium
 * ✅, I added it for 2020 Olympics too
 * At the 2016 Games, did she do anything at the uneven bars individual event?
 * ✅ She was the third reserve for the final. I added that information.
 * overall, in the whole article, there are 16 cases of "then". Sometimes they are too close to each other (2017: First World medal has 5). See if you can rephrase or simply drop it.
 * (Stalder to Tkatchev with 1/2 turn) --> any links here would help the user
 * During the uneven bars final, Derwael scored 15.233, earning the gold medal and defending her World title on the uneven bars --> that's twice "uneven bars". One of them should suffice.
 * on the third season Belgium's Dancing with the Stars --> I suspect there is an "of" needed before Belgium
 * During the uneven bars final, Derwael scored 15.233, earning the gold medal and defending her World title on the uneven bars --> that's twice "uneven bars". One of them should suffice.
 * on the third season Belgium's Dancing with the Stars --> I suspect there is an "of" needed before Belgium
 * on the third season Belgium's Dancing with the Stars --> I suspect there is an "of" needed before Belgium

Media
Nothing with appropriate rights that can be added?
 * Nope

That's all I could see. Overall, it looks good. Edwininlondon (talk) 21:04, 13 June 2022 (UTC)
 * I believe that this now meets the GA criteria. Promoting. Too bad there is no appropriately licensed photo of her. I am no legal expert but perhaps someone who is can see if WP:FAIRUSE applies. I don't think so. Anyway, nice work overall, well done! Edwininlondon (talk) 13:19, 22 June 2022 (UTC)