Talk:No Angel (Beyoncé song)/GA3

GA Review
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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 21:11, 18 June 2016 (UTC)

Infobox

 * Remove the "flatlist" from the "Genre" parameter as there is only one listed (flatlists are meant to be used for multiple items.)

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 * "It was written by James Fauntleroy, Caroline Polachek, and Beyoncé while the latter two also served as its producers." --> "It was written by James Fauntleroy, Caroline Polachek, and Beyoncé while the latter two and Boots served as its producers."
 * "Polachek worked on several songs for the singer's album with her bandmate from Chairlift, Patrick Wimberly, and eventually "No Angel" was included on the record." --> "Polachek worked on several songs for the singer's album with her bandmate from Chairlift, Patrick Wimberly, before "No Angel" was included on the record."

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 * Yes, it's obvious, but you need to cite who wrote and produced the song; you can use the album's liner notes if you desire
 * "Beyoncé handled the track's vocal production, and American musician Boots provided additional production." --> "Beyoncé handled the track's vocal production, while American musician Boots provided additional production."

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 * Please insert a comma in between "were noted in its beat" and "[5] with critics also..."
 * Please insert a comma in between "multiple finger snaps" and "[7][8] in addition to..."
 * "She sings with a falsetto vocal register; Andrew Hampp and Erika Ramirez of Billboard called it a return of the falsetto" --> "She sings with a falsetto vocal register, with Andrew Hampp and Erika Ramirez of Billboard calling it a return of the falsetto"

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 * Please link "indie-R&B" to the article for "Alternative R&B"

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 * Please link "music critics" to the article for "Music journalism"
 * ", her cooing breathy and flawed" --> This part of the quote doesn't make sense as its placement makes it grammatically incorrect; please just remove it altogether for the sake of the quote

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 * Link "Rolling Stone" as this is the first mention of it in the article
 * Please remove "on the album." after "[p]rettiest slinky Eighties electro-soul jammy"

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 * Nothing! Great work!

Background

 * "A music video for "No Angel" was released on December 13, 2013 through the iTunes Store on Beyoncé itself along with a clip for every other track on the album." --> "A music video for "No Angel" was released on December 13, 2013 through the iTunes Store, in addition to a clip for every other track on the parent album."
 * "Diplo contacted the director and told him that the singer would like to collaborate with him"? This is unclear who the second "him" is in the sentence; please clarify and reword it
 * "Beyonce's team" --> "Beyoncé's team"

Filming and synopsis

 * Again, nothing! Good job! :)

Reception

 * I'd consider condensing this sub–section a bit, as it is roughly the same size as the previous, two sub–sections combined
 * Wording change: "and showed things which did not look..." --> "and showed things that did not look..."
 * Rest is good

End of GA Review:
Thanks for the article, a very good read! I will be placing the article on hold for seven days to allow for changes. The article looks fantastic and is a definite candidate for a GA! Contact me be @PINGing me with any questions, comments, or concerns you may have. Thanks again and good luck. Cheers, Carbrera (talk) 02:26, 19 June 2016 (UTC).
 * Thank you very much. Everything is ✅. My love is love 09:50, 19 June 2016 (UTC)