Talk:Nokian Tyres/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Mûĸĸâĸûĸâĸû  04:37, 8 December 2009 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose quality:
 * B. MoS compliance:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. References to sources:
 * B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Pass or Fail:

Otherwise:
 * I am confused by the sentence: "Nokian Tyre has achieved the highest profit in the tire industry worldwide." What exactly are the constraints of this statement? Were these profits in the past year, in the past decade, for all time? Is it comparing the lifetime profits of a company like Nokian which has been around for 100+ years to a little mom-n-pop shop that's been around for six months? ✅
 * The headings in the "factories" section should just be completely removed. There is but a paragraph about each factory, and a reader does not need big bold letters telling them what the paragraph is about. (If it were three, four paragraphs, sure; one? no.) ✅
 * Consider general headings for the product section instead of the products themselves -- ex. "commercial vehicle tires" and "passenger car tires" and "other products". This will allow for the absorption of the microsections and microparagraphs currently floating about the section. ✅
 * "The first factory was built in 1904 with a new factory built in 1945." Does this mean there are two factories in Nokia? Or was one torn down and the other built in its place? Or something else? Ambiguous. ✅
 * "In 1871, Idestam, with the help of his close friend statesman Leo Mechelin, renamed and transformed his firm into a share company, thereby founding the Nokia Company." What firm? There was no mention of a firm previously, just two mills. A "firm" is an economic entity like an incorporated business, at least in my understanding. ✅
 * Suomen Gummitehdas Oy (Finnish Rubber Works) only needs to be translated once. I think it's done so two or three times. ✅
 * "Eventually the Nokian Tyre name was coined." 'Eventually' in this case is a weasel word.. Be specific. ✅
 * The history section should be reordered to follow a more linear format (first this happened, then this, then this, &tc.) For example, the bike tires talks about the 2004 selling of the bike tire business, then the history of the production of the tires (started in 1974). The whole section should read more like -- first the company sold this; then they expanded to sell this other product and named that part of the company something; then they expanded to sell something else; then this part of the company was sold off... a linear progression. ✅

-- Mûĸĸâĸûĸâĸû 05:20, 8 December 2009 (UTC)

Re-revew: 2009-12-08

 * The two Business Week links are still dead. Maybe there is another better source for the same information? The links don't seem very stable. ✅
 * The "Factories", "Products", and "Vianor..." sections are devoid of wikilinks. Not that I'm saying to go crazy and overlink things, but surely there are at least a few terms in those sections that are important enough to link? ✅
 * Excellent job reworking the History section -- it is very well done.

-- Mûĸĸâĸûĸâĸû  00:52, 9 December 2009 (UTC)