Talk:Nonsuicidal self-injury disorder

Summary This Wikipedia draft outlines the concept of Nonsuicidal Self-Injury Disorder (NSSI), which is a mental disorder where people harm themselves without the intent of committing suicide. The article goes into detail about the relationship between suicide and NSSI before detailing the Signs and Symptoms of NSSI. The article includes a section that discusses the functions of NSSI and the reason why people have engaged in NSSI. Next the article briefly describes psychiatric disorders that may be related to self injury, and will then go into treatment of NSSI, the outcomes of NSSI, and how it is portrayed in society and culture.

Major Points Hojman does not clarify whether or not they are improving and/or expanding a current Wikipedia article or creating a new one. Due to curiosity, I typed "nonsuicidal self-injury disorder" into Wikipedia and was redirected to "Self-Harm." This article seems to be very similar to the one that the author is currently working on. If the author is intending to improve the "Self-Harm" article they should make it clear in their Context Memo with the final draft and should possibly consider only working on the information that is not present in the already developed article.

The article could benefit from the author including a section that discusses the relationship between suicide and NSSI. Currently this information is in the introduction of the article, but would allow for a better read if it was given its own section.

The current draft does provide a good amount of references and citations, but could include more citations in certain instances. There are some cases where the author will present a statistic (percentage) regarding the results of certain studies. These values should be cited as they can currently be perceived as made-up percentages. The article also contains some sentences that reference the outcomes from certain studies but do not actually cite these studies.

Hojman's article is able to maintain a tone of neutrality throughout its information and provides a good amount of links to direct readers to the relevant articles. This could be expanded on more though by possibly providing links to the different disorders themselves.

Minor Points The article seems to have very few grammatical errors, those of which can easily be fixed by proof-reading. One instance is in the Anxiety Disorder section. The sentence reads: "In a study by Brain, Haines, and Williams (1995) found that self-injuring individuals had decreases in heart rate, respiration, and skin conductancy level in response to self-harm imagery scripts." Hojman should eliminate "in" at the beginning of the sentence. The introduction of the draft seems to summarize what will be talked about later in the article instead of providing a brief overview of the topic. This leads to some repetition and somewhat dilutes the information that the author is presenting.

Although it may be graphic, this draft would benefit from an image depicting this disorder. It may also be beneficial to provide a graph or table that shows what leads to self harm and the different outcomes that individuals might receive.

Closing Remarks This draft so far is written very well and provides a great deal of information regarding the topic. As the author has proclaimed, there is still some more work that should be done and in doing so the final product will be a great read. I look forward to seeing the author's final article. Jojaffer (talk) 04:22, 29 November 2016 (UTC)