Talk:North Coast Hiawatha/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 17:44, 23 November 2013 (UTC)

Hi Mackensen, I'll be glad to take this one. Comments to follow in the next 1-5 days. Thanks again for your work on it, Khazar2 (talk) 17:44, 23 November 2013 (UTC)

Okay, on my first pass, this looks good. It appears to cover the main aspects, the prose is fine, and it's generally well-sourced.

The only source issue I see right off is with the four pictures used as sources. This seems to me to be moving into original research. I trust you that you can correctly identify the types of cars in the pictures, but these pictures aren't enough for a generalization like "In the early 1970s a typical train might feature as many as four dome cars pulled by ex-Milwaukee Road EMD E9s" or "The train was one of many routes to receive the new EMD SDP40F, which worked the route between 1974–1977, although older EMD E8 and EMD E9s continued to be used". I also don't know how much editorial oversight a site like RailPictures.Net does to make sure the correct train is being photographed on the correct day.

Do you have sources that discuss the train's consist in prose? I'd suggest all material that relies on photographs should be deleted.

Now I'll take a look again at the previous, withdrawn review and see if there's anything I agree with that I'm missing so far. -- Khazar2 (talk) 14:51, 24 November 2013 (UTC)
 * Okay, I made one more tweak based on the previous review. By the way, feel free to revert any of the tweaks I've made directly to the article that you might disagree with. -- Khazar2 (talk) 14:56, 24 November 2013 (UTC)
 * As it happens Sanders does discuss consist and equipment in sufficient detail, so I've rewritten using him as the reference. I don't think I had access to Sanders when I wrote that originally, and you're absolutely right that we have to do better. Mackensen (talk) 16:01, 24 November 2013 (UTC)
 * Oh, terrific. That resolves that, then; thanks for the quick response. -- Khazar2 (talk) 16:36, 24 November 2013 (UTC)