Talk:Not My Presidents Day/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Prinsgezinde (talk · contribs) 14:57, 11 April 2017 (UTC)

I will be reviewing this page today. Bataaf van Oranje (Prinsgezinde) (talk) 14:57, 11 April 2017 (UTC)
 * Great! Thank you. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:02, 11 April 2017 (UTC)
 * Pinging you, in case you don't receive a notification on your talk page like I did. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:03, 11 April 2017 (UTC)
 * thanks for the head's up. I should be available all day to address any issues. :) Megalibrarygirl (talk) 16:23, 11 April 2017 (UTC)

Discussion
I propose addressing your concerns in a bulleted list below:
 * 1a: I removed the words "literally" and "in", per your requests. I changed "went into the evening" to "lasted into the evening". Does this help? I also added "organized", so the sentence now reads, "... group called 'Bad and Nasty' Baltimore' organized a 'day of art and activism'..." I hope these address your concerns, but do let me know if you had something different in mind. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 17:39, 11 April 2017 (UTC)
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 18:32, 11 April 2017 (UTC)
 * 1b: I agree with you re: "Not My President Day" (which I removed from the lead), but I think we should leave the alternate spellings of Presidents vs. President's vs. Presidents', as all three can be found in sourcing. --- Another Believer  ( Talk ) 17:52, 11 April 2017 (UTC)
 * Can you show some of the sources for the " Presidents' " variant? Thank you. Bataaf van Oranje (Prinsgezinde) (talk) 18:12, 11 April 2017 (UTC)
 * Sure:
 * https://www.seattlemet.com/events/not-my-presidents-day
 * http://www.thestranger.com/events/24879640/not-my-presidents-day-outrage-onstage
 * https://lawstreetmedia.com/blogs/politics-blog/anti-trump-activists-stage-not-my-presidents-day-protests/
 * http://kstp.com/news/not-my-presidents-day-rally-minneapolis-oppose-donald-trump-policies-immigration-reform/4405193/
 * https://sputniknews.com/us/201702211050885244-trump-presidents-day-protest/
 * i will also note that, while this does not have anything to do with sourcing about this evening specifically, the Washington's Birthday article includes Presidents' Day in bold text in the lead as an alternate title. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 18:17, 11 April 2017 (UTC)
 * Ah, of course. It completely went over my head that that spelling takes on the spelling of "Presidents' Day". I'll change it. Bataaf van Oranje (Prinsgezinde) (talk) 18:23, 11 April 2017 (UTC)
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 18:32, 11 April 2017 (UTC)


 * 2a: ✅
 * 2b: You said, "However, a clear problem is that the article contains many quotes and/or words and phrases within quotation marks that are not directly attributed." However, both Megalibrarygirl and I are surprised by this comment. Can you be more specific? --- Another Believer  ( Talk ) 17:50, 11 April 2017 (UTC)
 * See further discussion below. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 18:34, 11 April 2017 (UTC)
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:03, 12 April 2017 (UTC)


 * 2c: ✅
 * 2d: ✅
 * 3a: I've started this section and would like some feedback. Thanks! Megalibrarygirl (talk) 19:11, 11 April 2017 (UTC)
 * What's there is good. But it's not a lot yet. Will you add the effects and aftermath to that section or will that be a new one? Bataaf van Oranje (Prinsgezinde) (talk) 22:18, 11 April 2017 (UTC)
 * Hi, I've added more to the section and expanded out the planning section, too. Thanks! Megalibrarygirl (talk) 00:07, 12 April 2017 (UTC)
 * I'm glad the planning section has expanded. Improvements could still be made to the Aftermath/impact/followup section (expand) and the infobox. We're close! Bataaf van Oranje (Prinsgezinde) (talk) 12:15, 12 April 2017 (UTC)


 * 3b: ✅
 * 4: ✅
 * Neutrality was our primary focus throughout, and I am glad you've deemed this article's content as such. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 17:32, 11 April 2017 (UTC)
 * 5: ✅
 * 6a: ✅
 * 6b: Unfortunately, the maps cannot be made smaller without the text getting jumbled together. You find the maps 'interesting'. User:Megalibrarygirl and I both like the maps, as does the editor who we reached out for help at the Graphics Lab. No editor has openly stated a problem with any of the maps, and this article has received quite a bit of traffic and feedback given all the discussions on the talk page and on other project pages. Perhaps the US map could be collapsed?, but I don't really know if that is preferred. Are you open to leaving the maps because they do not go against Good article criteria, and we can just see over time if editors raise any concerns about their inclusion? If we find them helpful for the purposes of illustration, then I think we should consider leaving them, at least for now. Thoughts? --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 17:48, 11 April 2017 (UTC)
 * It is a well done job, absolutely. And I would hate to see it gone for the sake of looking pretty. I was only slightly concerned with the amount of media on the page. Perhaps when more text has been added there will be more space for it? For now, be assured that this is not a case for failing the article. I'll change the "neutral" to "?" for clarity's sake. Bataaf van Oranje (Prinsgezinde) (talk) 18:12, 11 April 2017 (UTC)
 * Thanks. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 18:15, 11 April 2017 (UTC)


 * 7: Discussion below

Feel free to add your own within this framework as you see fit. Just trying to make this an organized discussion since we have more than 2 editors, and I'd prefer not to enter comments into the table above for the purposes of organization and simplicity. Thanks! --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 17:30, 11 April 2017 (UTC)
 * , I'll try to address 3a right now. However, I'm confused about where we used quotes and didn't attribute. I didn't think that had happened. It seems like we'll have to comb through each reference and double check. Megalibrarygirl (talk) 17:39, 11 April 2017 (UTC)
 * Yeah, I didn't really think this would be identified as a problem either. I am addressing some of the other concerns right now, but will try to revisit. Thanks for taking a look as well. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 17:40, 11 April 2017 (UTC)
 * As I said, not all are necessarily quotes. Some were phrases and/or words within quotation marks. But these still need to be attributed (meaning not only cited) or adjusted to avoid becoming scarequotes or simply gratuitous. But also remember that in many of these cases, simply removing the quotation marks and (if necessary) rewording it slightly gives a better result. Examples from the article:
 * Good (attribution clear, actual quote):
 * Participants reportedly chanted "We need a leader, not a creepy tweeter" and sang "God Bless America" and "The Star-Spangled Banner".
 * The protests in Miami and Palm Beach were organized by South Florida Activism, and included a gathering at Palm Beach International Airport where participants turned their backs to Trump's motorcade en route to Mar-a-Lago, wearing shirts that displayed "No 45."
 * The group who protested outside of Wheeler's home obtained a permit for the demonstration, however, the organizer, Gregory McKelvey, also said that the mayor is "perpetuating this idea we only get hurt or sprayed or physically beat because we don't have a permit."
 * Bad (not an actual quote, not attributed or gratuitous):
 * The 16th Street Mall and nearby streets were shut down for around two hours, but no arrests were made and businesses experienced "limited disruptions". (Who said this?)
 * I changed "limited disruptions" to "few disturbances" and removed the quotations. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 18:52, 11 April 2017 (UTC)
 * Only 18 people expressed interest in attending the event on its Facebook page, and fewer than ten individuals ended up participating. The protest reportedly saw "five or six people arguing with a lone Donald Trump supporter".
 * I rephrased this sentence and removed the quotation marks. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 18:52, 11 April 2017 (UTC)
 * State senator, Art Haywood, attended the Philadelphia rally and there was a "family-friendly fun station" set up for children of protesters.
 * I removed "fun" and the quotation marks, so it just reads "family-friendly station set up..". --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 18:52, 11 April 2017 (UTC)
 * A "modest gathering" in Pasadena was organized by a small group of "concerned" mothers and their children, led by Jenna Karvunidis.
 * I changed modest to small and removed the quotation marks around 'concerned'. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 18:52, 11 April 2017 (UTC)
 * In Ann Arbor, a "Bad Hombres and Nasty Women" event featuring "uncensored performances" expected an attendance of 600 people; proceeds benefited Planned Parenthood.
 * The "uncensored performances" part.
 * The sentence now reads, "... featuring reportedly "uncensored" performances expected..." I added the word 'reportedly' but kept 'uncensored' in quotation marks. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 18:52, 11 April 2017 (UTC)
 * Actually, Megalibrarygirl changed the sentence to just say 'live performances', which works for me. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 19:17, 11 April 2017 (UTC)
 * The event attracted around 50 participants; candles were distributed and lit to represent the "flame of progress to be held unwavering in the future".
 * I attributed this quotation to The Record. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 19:00, 11 April 2017 (UTC)
 * One protester was tackled by the police and then shot with "non-lethal projectiles".[106] One man who was "one step off the curb" in the street was pushed to the ground by police, had his arms pinned to his back and then was pepper-sprayed in the face; and a woman was shoved to the sidewalk and then shot with "pepper balls" by police.
 * Bataaf van Oranje (Prinsgezinde) (talk) 18:04, 11 April 2017 (UTC)
 * I removed the quotation marks around 'non-lethal projectiles' and added 'reportedly' in front of "one step off the curb". --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 19:02, 11 April 2017 (UTC)
 * Hmm, I'm still not sure I understand the problem. I am quoting the news articles or whoever was reporting. Do we really need to say "according to a report" each time? --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 18:10, 11 April 2017 (UTC)
 * According to MOS:QUOTE, yes. It is a quotation after all. But I stress that in many cases they don't need to be quotes. Simply remove the quotation marks and make it fit the sentence. For example, "non-lethal projectiles" in the above-mentioned sentence does not need to be within quotation marks. "modest gathering" can simply be changing to "gathering" (again without the quotation marks). Bataaf van Oranje (Prinsgezinde) (talk) 18:14, 11 April 2017 (UTC)
 * OK, I tried to make improvements, but please let me know if additional concerns remain. Thanks! --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 19:03, 11 April 2017 (UTC)
 * Much better. I went through the article again and there are only two quotations left that I see as inappropriate. Both are in the second paragraph of "Locations and activities".
 * It lasted into the evening and had a reportedly "different tone than elsewhere in the rest of the country, with less protesting, more talking".
 * Reword or give credit to who said it, as this is a largely subjective statement.
 * A group called "Bad and Nasty' Baltimore" organized a "day of art and activism", which included face painting, sign making, and a workshop titled "our Democratic Heritage".
 * "day of art and activism" is too generic to put between quotes. Quotation marks can simply be removed here. The other two quotes are fine, although I'm pretty sure the single apostrophe after "Nasty" is not supposed to be there.
 * After fixing these I'll change the criteria rating. Bataaf van Oranje (Prinsgezinde) (talk) 22:15, 11 April 2017 (UTC)
 * I added "CBS Baltimore" to the first and removed quotes around "day of art and activism". Thanks! --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 22:19, 11 April 2017 (UTC)
 * Good job there, that's another thing done then. Bataaf van Oranje (Prinsgezinde) (talk) 11:57, 12 April 2017 (UTC)

Prinsgezinde, I merged some of the media (NY and Oregon in particular) and did some image staggering. I quite like how the article is illustrated, but let me know if you have any concerns. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 01:27, 12 April 2017 (UTC)
 * Sorry, what exactly was done? I'm noticing a much better lay-out but can't determine the specifics. I see some new maps and less separate external media boxes but would like to hear it from you. Thank you. Bataaf van Oranje (Prinsgezinde) (talk) 12:15, 12 April 2017 (UTC)
 * Sure, so here's a diff (feel free to ignore all of the reference formatting and just focus on the media changes). Not major changes, but really I just merged the External media templates in the New York and Oregon sections, lined media up along the right side of the page and made them the same width, giving a very uniform appearance. I also did some image staggering in order to minimize section heading disturbances. The text in the US map was too jumbled in the Northeast, so I removed NY entries and created a new map for this state. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:00, 12 April 2017 (UTC)
 * Got it. As mentioned above, the last step is in coverage. The two things that still need expansion are Infobox content and the Aftermath/impact/followup section. When those are expanded the lay-out will change again. With more space, some more things could be moved to the right to avoid the section heading disturbances you mentioned it should be noted that differents screens have different resolutions, so one person's lay-out may not be exactly the same as another's. That's why large content is preferably on the right side, but it's not mandatory. Bataaf van Oranje (Prinsgezinde) (talk) 16:30, 12 April 2017 (UTC)
 * Right now, only the NY section heading is disturbed, which does not bother me. I think the current layout looks great, but we'll see if any further changes are helpful if the article is expanded further. I'm at a loss for what else to add to the article re: outcomes, goals, etc., but I'll see if Megalibrarygirl has other thoughts. Most of the sourcing is logistical in nature, describing what took place and when. Opposition to Trump is obvious, but other goals? Not clear, or at least not specific and uniform thoughout to note in an infobox, in my opinion. I also don't think there are any single leaders worth noting in the infobox. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 17:39, 12 April 2017 (UTC)
 * Some figures seem important. They don't need to be actual "leaders", just leading figures of the movement. Holly Hughes had a big hand in organizing it, and Gregory McKelvey was noted for his organizing of the problematic Portland event. Also, I meant a single section for the aftermath. It could have subsections for reactions and impact etc. The thing is, of course media would report the events as they happened. But the article needs assessment sources, if you know what I mean. Perhaps some of the groups that participated in the demonstrations have material on their website? Bataaf van Oranje (Prinsgezinde) (talk) 20:44, 12 April 2017 (UTC)
 * In my opinion, singling out any specific organizers would be giving them undue weight. This event was a series of local events, not a 'movement', and there were not primary national organizers like there have been in other recent protests. Megalibrarygirl may have a differing opinion, but I don't think we should emphasize local organizers and put focus on some over others. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 20:56, 12 April 2017 (UTC)
 * "civil conflict" infoboxes are commonly used when there are two clear sides. The other side in this case could contain "Pro-Trump protesters" or even "Portland police"; though it also wasn't truly a conflict (except maybe in Portland), so it's also worth considering swapping to Template:Infobox event. Either way, the current infobox doesn't say anything that isn't already in the lead. Bataaf van Oranje (Prinsgezinde) (talk) 09:03, 13 April 2017 (UTC)

Prinsgezinde, I am not sure if Megalibrarygirl is still tinkering with things or not, but at this point I think we could both use clear, specific needs in order for this article to meet GA criteria. See my comment above re: local organizers, and do you have a specific section heading for groups the reactions and impact sections? --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 02:54, 13 April 2017 (UTC)
 * "Aftermath" is standard. It can include reactions, impact, possible followups and anything inbetween. Bataaf van Oranje (Prinsgezinde) (talk) 09:03, 13 April 2017 (UTC)
 * Alright, I placed the Reactions and Impact sections under an Aftermath heading. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 14:37, 13 April 2017 (UTC)
 * Oh I like that so much better. Thanks, . Megalibrarygirl (talk) 17:33, 13 April 2017 (UTC)

Please let us know if any outstanding concerns remain. Thanks! --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 03:17, 15 April 2017 (UTC)
 * Sincere apologies, I was unexpectedly busy and only able to access Wikipedia on my phone (which is still a pain). As above, consider changing the infobox to "Infobox event" if it can't be expanded otherwise. The rest seems to be in order. Bataaf van Oranje (Prinsgezinde) (talk) 09:10, 16 April 2017 (UTC)
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 01:19, 17 April 2017 (UTC)
 * I'm very satisfied with the result. It was only my second GA review but it went quite smoothly, all things considered. The article is now considered a "good article" and I'll be adding it accordingly. Thanks to you both for the cooperation. Bataaf van Oranje (Prinsgezinde) (talk) 16:09, 17 April 2017 (UTC)
 * Thanks for taking time to review this nomination. Much appreciated! --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 16:11, 17 April 2017 (UTC)