Talk:Not Today (BTS song)/GA1

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Reviewer: The Most Comfortable Chair (talk · contribs) 13:21, 29 August 2020 (UTC)

Hello. I will have the review in a day or two. Thank you. — The Most Comfortable Chair 13:21, 29 August 2020 (UTC)

General

 * Is "Big Hit Entertainment" or "Big Hit" the common term? I reckon it's the latter, and if so remove "Entertainment" throughout the article. — The Most Comfortable Chair 07:16, 30 August 2020 (UTC)
 * kept it as Big Hit Entertainment on first mention in both lead and body.

Lead

 * "It was released on February 20, 2017, as the" → "It was released on February 20, 2017 as the".
 * "single" from "album's second single" should be unlinked per MOS:OL.
 * ❌ See Mic Drop (song), Black Swan (song), Physical (Dua Lipa song), all of which are GAs.


 * "issued on May 10, 2017, through" → "issued on May 10, 2017 through".
 * "that included tracks "Blood Sweat & Tears" and "Spring Day", both also in Japanese" → "that included Japanese versions of "Blood Sweat & Tears" and "Spring Day"."
 * ❌ it was rephrased in this manner to avoid repetition of "Japanese versions".


 * Years in brackets for "Blood Sweat & Tears" and "Spring Day".
 * "Music critics" should be unlinked per MOS:OL, although I have noticed a number of BTS articles linking it. Is there a consensus on this? If not, it should not be linked on any of them. I checked out a few FAs and GAs of other artists and they do not link it either.
 * ❌ This is unnecessary. I have always linked it in GAs that I've written..


 * "Music video" should be unlinked per above.
 * ❌ See Mic Drop (song), Black Swan (song), Physical (Dua Lipa song), all of which are GAs.


 * "The music video for the song was directed by Sung-wook Kim of GDW and was released on February 20, 2017." → "The music video for the song directed by Sung-wook Kim of GDW was released on February 20, 2017."
 * What is "GDW"? If there is full-form, that should be used unless "GDW" is the known term (like BTS).
 * Not known


 * A more neutral term instead of "powerful"?
 * placed this word inside quotations as I'm directly quoting it from the press review.


 * "choreography-version" → "choreography version".
 * "A choreography-version of the video features close-up and wide-angled shots of the band performing choreography to the song. — The beginning and end of this sentence indicate the same thing. Perhaps describe the video in brief instead of "performing choreography to the song."?
 * changed to "dance version" in the former sentence as the video features just choreography.


 * "Language" parameter for the infobox.

Background and release

 * "announced in January 2017, that a sequel" → "announced in January 2017 that a sequel".
 * Don't write "2017" again and again after its mentioned once.
 * Can link RM.
 * ""Spring Day", released on February 13, 2020 by Big Hit Entertainment." — Don't have to mention Big Hit Entertainment for this.
 * Timeline is a little mixed up. Rewrite it in a manner that February 13 comes after February 12.
 * Carlobunnie, can you please help in rewriting this part? I can't think of better way to do this and I think you would be able to rephrase this well. Many thanks in advance. -- Ashley  yoursmile!  15:36, 30 August 2020 (UTC)


 * I suppose "Spring Day" did not come out in 2020.
 * "Big Hit Studios, Seoul, South Korea." — Remove "South Korea".
 * "at Schmuzik Studios" — perhaps you could mention the city in which it is located?
 * "in various countries by Big Hit Entertainment on February 20, 2017, as the second single from You Never Walk Alone." → "in various countries by Big Hit Entertainment on February 20, 2017 as the second single from You Never Walk Alone." Also, unlink Big Hit Entertainment here.
 * " A Japanese version of the song was recorded and issued digitally for purchase on May 10, 2017 by Universal Music Japan as a B-side track of the band's seventh Japanese-language single album, together with the Japanese versions of their Korean singles "Blood Sweat & Tears" and "Spring Day"." — It is too long, so split this sentence into two.
 * "as A-side and "Not Today" as a B-side track" — unlink B-side here.
 * "containing the music videos for the Korean and Japanese versions of "Blood, Sweat & Tears"." → "containing music videos for the Korean and Japanese versions of "Blood, Sweat & Tears"."
 * Years in brackets for "Blood Sweat & Tears" and "Spring Day".
 * Unlink behind the scenes.
 * "while C contains" → "while edition C contains".

Music and lyrics

 * Unlink musical notion, pre-chorus and chorus.
 * ❌ No reason why these can't be linked.


 * The audio file should ideally be on the right, unless there is an image file there. It disrupts reading flow when it is on the left side.
 * "RM stated" → "RM said".
 * "references to the idea of breaking all invisible barriers that stop people from succeeding." → "references the idea of breaking all invisible barriers that prevent people from succeeding."
 * "Tamar Herman of Billboard believed that the lyrics addressed social and political issues." — This line should come before the part where you describe themes of anti-establishment, and rallying against injustice, corruption and irrationality.
 * I feel it flows better the way it is now.

Reception

 * Unlink music critics.
 * unnecessary


 * "in its first week of release." → "in its first week."
 * "it charted at number 23 on" → "it peaked at number 23 on"

Music video

 * Unlink music video.
 * unnecessary


 * ""Not Today", directed by Sung-wook Kim of GDW, was uploaded on Big" → ""Not Today", directed by Sung-wook Kim of GDW was uploaded on Big".
 * Unlink film series.
 * "they start performing powerful choreography," — a neutral term instead of "powerful"? "Rapid" or something else? Either that or use "..." like it is used in "rapid-fire" later on.
 * that's how its mentioned, thus using quotes.
 * "dance version" → "choreography version".
 * A more neutral term than "powerful" here as well.
 * same as above

Live performances

 * "on February 23, 2017." → "on February 23."
 * "on December 2, 2017." → "on December 2."
 * "performed the song at the SBS Gayo Daejeon music festival on December 25, 2017." → "performed the song at the 2017 SBS Gayo Daejeon music festival on December 25."
 * "On December 29, 2017" → "On December 29".
 * Years in brackets for "DNA" and "Mic Drop".
 * Both were released in 2017.

Credits and personnel

 * Unlink liner notes and You Never Walk Alone.
 * Mention year in brackets after "You Never Walk Alone".
 * Are you sure that it is to be mentioned here?

Final

 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * I won't hold it over for one minor rephrasing. It is well-written and meets the criteria. Thank you for all your efforts. — The Most Comfortable Chair 10:21, 31 August 2020 (UTC)
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * I won't hold it over for one minor rephrasing. It is well-written and meets the criteria. Thank you for all your efforts. — The Most Comfortable Chair 10:21, 31 August 2020 (UTC)
 * I won't hold it over for one minor rephrasing. It is well-written and meets the criteria. Thank you for all your efforts. — <b style="color:#000000">The Most Comfortable</b> <b style="color:#4B0082">Chair</b> 10:21, 31 August 2020 (UTC)