Talk:Nothing Revealed / Everything Denied/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 16:50, 8 April 2021 (UTC)

I will review this soon, hopefully leading to you having the last GA required to nominate the Notes on a Conditional Form GT! --K. Peake 16:50, 8 April 2021 (UTC)


 * Thanks for the review! This is the last one, so hopefully GT soon!  Gia co bbe  talk 18:43, 8 April 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Should electro be piped to electronic music or Electro (music)?
 * Pipe Matthew Healy to Matty Healy under songwriter(s) and in the lead prose
 * There is a rule that everything in the lead needs to be mentioned in the body, so write out the writers and producers there
 * "The song's creation was" → "Its creation was"
 * Again, should electro be piped to electronic music or Electro (music)?
 * Remove hip hop from the groove part because this is too much detail for the lead
 * Either add sacred diagrams to what footage appears or only keep the first two and add "among others" at the end of the sentence

Background and development

 * Quote box and first para both look good!
 * "began with a piano piece" → "came from a piano piece"
 * Wikilink breakbeat
 * Pipe loop to Loop (music)
 * Wikilink J Dilla
 * "said the song's creation was" → "said parts of the song's creation were"
 * The notes do not appear to show him mentioning artists failing to take a stance, unless I misinterpreted it?
 * "I find that a lot of people who are out there doing their thing musically, who aren’t challenging any ideas, are only made interesting through association or projection. I don’t feel like a lot of people stand by stuff." I just paraphrased the last sentence.  Gia co bbe  talk 12:30, 9 April 2021 (UTC)


 * ""If you give" → ""[I]f you give" per the source

Music and lyrics

 * Audio sample looks good!
 * Again, should electro be piped to electronic music or Electro (music)?
 * "about himself from past tracks." → "about himself from their lyrics." to be less repetitive
 * [23] should be solely at the end of the sentence
 * Pipe low-pitched to Pitch (music)
 * The quote in the last sentence is not sourced

Reception

 * "praising its "grandeur" → "praising the "grandeur" to avoid using "it" or "the song" too close to the last instances
 * "while noting it explores" → "while noting the song explores"
 * Why is Kitty Empire mentioned as writing for The Observer when this review was clearly a piece for The Guardian?
 * "for the band." → "for the 1975."
 * "the album's "more successful" → "the album's "[m]ore successful"
 * "saying: "The 1975 are" → "saying it is an example of where "[t]he 1975 are"
 * "radio-friendly hooks."" → "radio-friendly hooks"." per MOS:QUOTE
 * Three reviews in one sentence is too much so give the musicOMH one its own sentence: "On a similar note, Ross Horton of musicOMH called it" or "called the bridge" if the source mentions that part specifically
 * "deconstruction of the band's" → "deconstruction of the 1975's"
 * Make the Pitchfork review its one sentence per my earlier comment
 * Wikilink UK Singles Chart

Music video

 * Img looks good!
 * Remove wikilink on Music for Cars Tour
 * The release date and 11th release part are unsourced, so use [37] after the first two sentences since it backs them up
 * Why are nematodes and eels listed in a different order from the source here?
 * "it is intended to" → "the 1975 asserted that it is intended to" to attribute the quote properly

Charts

 * Good

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed; looks like the last GA for the album is coming up!!! --K. Peake 08:07, 9 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Regarding my comment about writing out the producers and songwriters in the body, I suggest the opening section. --K. Peake 15:57, 9 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Hey, my apologies I had an exam. Added that part. Regarding the archive tool, it appears to be down at the moment.  Gia co bbe  talk 18:27, 9 April 2021 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, the archives not being able to be added is not an issue since the tool often breaks and you can do this at a later date. Good luck with your GT, plus it is fine that your exam caused a delay – I'll be on here less now that I start work at McDonald's in three days! --K. Peake 18:57, 9 April 2021 (UTC)