Talk:Nova (RL Grime album)/GA1

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Reviewer: Kyle Peake (talk · contribs) 07:08, 27 December 2019 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Source for recording ending in 2018? — A couple of sources within the album point to the album finishing recording in 2017, so I've changed it so. I'm unable to find anything proving 2018 was the end date.
 * Sure there isn't an exec producer? — Added Diplo as the executive producer, clarified and referenced it into the main body.
 * "Steinway; it was released" → "Steinway. It was released" —
 * "The record incorporates" → "Nova incorporates" at the start of a new para too —
 * WikiLink hip-hop to Hip hop music —
 * WikiLink R&B to Contemporary R&B —
 * "Steinway themed Nova" → "Steinway themed the album" —
 * "and named the album" → "and named it" —
 * "Four singles were released with the album" → "Four singles were released in promotion" and keep as part of previous para —
 * "The album was released as part of a self-titled tour;" → "A tour ran in November 2018 for Nova." start third para here —
 * "it attracted generally mixed-to-positive reviews" → "Upon release, the album received generally mixed to positive reviews from music critics" and try and add what was praised/commented on at the end of the sentence? — Added a short bit about it being it being more mainstream compared to RL Grimes previous album, taken from the critial reception bit.
 * "and peaked at number one" → "It peaked at number one" —
 * "Billboard Dance/Electronic Albums with 6,000 equivalent album unit sales." → "US Billboard Dance/Electronic Albums, with first-week sales of 6,000 units, while reaching number 50 on the Australian Albums chart." as the latter chart is just as notable —

Background and release

 * "to his previous album Void" → "to the previous album Void, released under the analysis of RL Grime" so we know that his stage name didn't change —
 * "the officially released album" → "the ultimately released album" —
 * Change [2][1] to be in ref order at the end of the sentence —
 * "was to be" → "was slated to be" —
 * "The album was released" → "Nova was released" —
 * "on digital download stores" none of the refs cited say anything about download, just streaming? Maybe try citing the ref used in the release history section as one of the multiple refs because that mentions digital and the ones here mention the labels? — Done, also added the streaming bit.
 * "After the album's official release" → "After its official release" —
 * "Steinway said the album's..." make this sentence part of the para above but leave the quote in its own para —
 * "Following the album's release" → "Following the release of Nova" —
 * "the music in Nova" → "the music" as we know it's about the album —
 * "Several songs such..." merge with above para —
 * "produced for the album" → "produced for Nova" —
 * "to be produced for the album;" → "that was produced;" —
 * "played an instrumental version of it" → "played an instrumental version of the track" —
 * "to provide vocals for the song." → "to provide vocals for the track." since you are using the term "songs" often so write the track, not the song —
 * "outside of his hotel" → "outside of Steinway's hotel" —
 * "produce the song" → "produce the track" —
 * "The record is mainly consisted" → "Nova is mainly consisted" —
 * Change R&B and hip-hop WikiLinks per lead —
 * "bass and hip-hop respectively" → "bass and hip-hop, respectively" —
 * "for the first volume and" → "for the first volume, and" —
 * "almost three months" → "around three months" —
 * "including Hex Cougar, Enschway, Part Native..." supermarket list here, crop it to the most notable ones? — Done, reduced the list to only those with their own wiki pages.
 * "with only some being announced such as" → "with only some being announced including" —

Singles

 * "as the album's lead single" → "as lead single from Nova" —
 * "Writing for MTV News" → "Writing for MTV News" —
 * "Billboard's Kat Bein" → "Billboard's Kat Bein" —
 * "Your EDM's Matthew" → "Your EDM's Matthew" —
 * "The album's tracklist" → "Nova's tracklist" —
 * "Your EDM's Matthew Meadow" → "Meadow" as we've already introduced him —
 * "the songs fusion of trap" → "the song's fusion of trap" —
 * "Kat Bein of Billboard" → "Bein" —
 * "Billboard called the track" → "Bein called the track" —
 * "Dancing Astronaut" → "Chris Stack from Dancing Astronaut" —

Critical reception

 * "Upon its release, Nova received mixed-to-positive reviews from music critics" → "Nova was met with mixed to positive reviews from music critics" —
 * "score of 57 based on" → "score of 57, based on" —
 * "album yet", grading it B-. Hall praised" → "album yet", with Hall praising" since we don't need to mention the grade given in the box —
 * "He picked" → "Hall picked" —
 * "said the album" → "said that the album" —
 * "Your EDM's Matthew Meadow" → "Meadow" —
 * Remove WikiLink on Dancing Astronaut —
 * "Matthew Cooper from" → "In a mixed review, Matthew Cooper from" —

Commercial performance

 * "on the Billboard Dance/Electronic Albums" → "on the 'Billboard Dance/Electronic Albums chart" —
 * "first-month sales" → "first-week sales" as that is the figure given for first-week on ref —
 * "on the Billboard 200" → "on the US Billboard 200" —
 * "Billboard Heatseekers Albums" → "Billboard Heatseekers Albums chart" —
 * "number 19 on the Billboard Independent Albums" → "and number 19 on the Billboard Independent Albums chart." —
 * "and number 50 on Australia's ARIA Charts." → "Elsewhere, Nova debuted at number 50 on the Australian Albums chart." —
 * "the Billboard Dance/Electronic Digital Songs respectively" → "the US Billboard Dance/Electronic Digital Songs chart, respectively" —
 * "Billboard Dance/Mix Show Airplay" → "Billboard Dance/Mix Show Airplay chart" —
 * "Dance/Electronic Digital Song Sales" → "Dance/Electronic Digital Song Sales chart" —

Track listing

 * Good

Personnel

 * Good

Charts

 * Since single positions are already sourced in the article, they don't need a table. Remove that and the col, just keep the weekly charts but don't have it as a subsection just the entire charts section. —

Release history

 * Center ref — Not sure how to do this with a consistent method, so I just centred the entire thing with HELP:TABLECENTER
 * See Jesus Is King for how to center ref —

Overall

 * Copyvio shows four of the refs with likely violation; that's gotta be fixed. — All four cite the same quote fom RL Grime, the one about an ever-expanding nova. I've replaced the article's quote with something a little different that isn't a quote.
 * Try and include a relevant pic somewhere in the article?— Done, might need some resizing and maybe some replacing, but they should be fine.
 * Good work but needs improving; for now! --Kyle Peake (talk) 07:08, 27 December 2019 (UTC)
 * Made a few minor tweaks myself after your hard work, ✅! --Kyle Peake (talk) 19:27, 28 December 2019 (UTC)