Talk:Nu-Clear Sounds/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 10:37, 25 September 2021 (UTC)

My first review for you in a long time; will take this on soon! --K. Peake 10:37, 25 September 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Separate studios in the infobox by using flatlist instead
 * Pipe Astoria to Astoria (recording studio)
 * Add a comma after debut studio album
 * Only introduce Charlotte Hatherley as being a guitarist since the Nightnurse part is too much detail for the lead
 * "joined the band." → "became a member."
 * "at a farmhouse in the country," what country? If not known, then only keep the farmhouse bit
 * "With sessions also held at" → "With additional sessions held at" to be more specific
 * Pipe Astoria to Astoria (recording studio)
 * "the band co-produced the proceedings with" → "Ash produced the proceedings alongside"
 * "Described as a garage rock album," → "A garage rock record," since "described" is not appropriate lead language
 * "the Rolling Stones, and" → "the Rolling Stones and" per British English
 * "inspired Nu-Clear Sounds." → "inspired the album."
 * "Preceded by the lead single" → "Preceded by Nu-Clear Sounds' lead single"
 * "and Europe until" → "and other parts of Europe until" since the UK is part of Europe (only left the EU!)
 * Pipe single to Single (music)
 * "the band played shows" → "Ash played shows"
 * "Australia, and Japan." → "Australia and Japan."
 * "they played a handful" → "they performed a handful"
 * "Nu-Clear Sounds was released in the US in September;" → "The album was released in the US in September 1999;"
 * Are you sure it is notable to mention here what songs are remixed or just write "three remixes"?
 * "at number 7 in the UK and charted in Australia, Germany, and Norway." → "at number seven in the UK, alongside reaching the top 50 in Australia, Norway and Scotland." per MOS:NUM and since the German position is too low to be notable for the lead
 * "Nu-Clear Sounds was certified" → "It was certified"
 * Mention the certification was by the British Phonographic Industry (BPI) at the end of the sentence

Background

 * Remove the commas after 1977 since this is in the body, not lead
 * "and Brian Bell, and dreamt" → "and Brian Bell; he dreamt"
 * "with the band" → "as part of Ash"
 * "the band had written" → "they had written"
 * Remove the comma before "while"
 * The source does not mention Ash wanting to break free from the Pop scene so maybe write "break free from the pigeonholing they experienced" instead
 * "while in Australia" → "while in Australia,"
 * "Mark Hamilton, and drummer" → "Mark Hamilton and drummer" but the members are not mentioned by the source
 * "and worked on" → "and working on"

Production

 * Retitle to Recording and production
 * "Chris Kimsey, and" → "Chris Kimsey and"
 * "They had previously built" → "Ash had previously built"
 * Pipe Mixing to Audio mixing (recorded music)
 * Pipe Astoria to Astoria (recording studio)
 * The studio info is not sourced
 * "Morris and the band mixed" → "Morris and Ash mixed"
 * "of "Low Ebb", and "I'm Gonna Fall", and added" → "of "Low Ebb" and "I'm Gonna Fall", alongside adding"

Composition

 * Retitle to Music and lyrics
 * "the Velvet Underground, and" → "the Velvet Underground and"
 * "except for "Projects"" → "with the exception of "Projects"" to be less repetitive
 * "solely by Hamilton), and" → "solely by Hamilton) and"
 * Shouldn't you write "hardcore songs" instead of "harder-sounding songs"?
 * The source (according to google translate) says "...series of hard clapping tracks..." I think they're referring to hard rock instead of hardcore punk. Yeepsi (talk) 17:16, 26 September 2021 (UTC)


 * ""Numberskull", and "Fortune Teller"" → ""Numberskull" and "Fortune Teller""
 * Pipe ballads to Sentimental ballad
 * ""Aphrodite", and "I'm Gonna Fall"." → ""Aphrodite" and "I'm Gonna Fall"."
 * "the band were known for," → "Ash were known for,"
 * Are you sure the more aggressive quote should be included since that seems to be the tweet's indicator of hardcore?
 * Add a source at the end of the percussion/strings sentence
 * "with the sound of" → "with the sounds of"
 * Add release year of Star Wars in brackets
 * "evokes the sound of" → "evokes the sound of both"
 * "the New York Dolls, and uses a lot of" → "the New York Dolls, while it heavily features"
 * "for the album." → "for Nu-Clear Sounds.
 * "was most reminiscent of" → "was described by Hamilton as most reminiscent of"
 * "on 1977, and featured" → "on 1977 and features
 * "includes elements of" → "includes reminiscent of"
 * Remove comma after New Order
 * The source does not mention Kurtaine as being responsible for scratching
 * "The band said it was" → "Ash said it was"
 * "featured strings that Morris" → "features strings that Morris"

Release

 * Retitle to Release and promotion
 * "played a few European festivals" → "played a few festivals in mainland Europe"
 * "as the lead single on" → "as the album's lead single on" with the wikilink
 * Pipe CD to Compact disc
 * ""Heroin, Vodka, White Noise", and the other with" → ""Heroin, Vodka, White Noise", while the other included"
 * "In October and early November," → "In October and early November 1998,"
 * "a tour of the UK." → "a tour of the United Kingdom."
 * "the band had been on" → "Ash had been on"
 * "the band embarked on a" → "Ash embarked on a"
 * "as the second single on" → "as the second single from Nu-Clear Sounds on"
 * ""When I'm Tired", and the other" → ""When I'm Tired" and the other"
 * "The band played a" → "Ash played a"
 * I don't think brackets are needed around the info saying who the original songs are by
 * Wikilink music video
 * "premiered on The Jo Whiley Show on 5 May." → "premiered for The Jo Whiley Show on 5 May 1999."
 * "In June, the band" → "In June 1999, the band"
 * "shows in the US, and" → "shows in the US and"
 * "The band played a few" → "Ash played a few"
 * "in June, and then in August," → "in June and then in August,"
 * "on 28 September through" → "on 28 September 1999 through"
 * "of the songs, and remixed" → "of the songs and remixed"
 * ""Wildsurf", and "Folk Song"" → ""Wildsurf" and "Folk Song""
 * "he had liked the album and" → "he was found of the album and"
 * "The band planned to promote" → "They planned to promote"
 * "the band's first compilation album" → "Ash's first compilation album" with the wikilink
 * ""Wildsurf", and "Numbskull"." → ""Wildsurf" and "Numbskull"." on any occasions
 * Remove commas around their second compilation album
 * Wikilink 7" vinyl per MOS:LINK2SECT
 * Remove commas around their third compilation album
 * ""Jesus Says", and "Wildsurf"." → ""Jesus Says" and "Wildsurf"."

Reception

 * "appeal" of Ash's debut," → "appeal" of 1977,"
 * "Hatherley "galvanizes ..." → "He further wrote that Hatherley "galvanizes ..."
 * "of the songs were" → "of the songs are"
 * "wrote the album saw the band" → "wrote the album sees Ash"
 * "found the album delivered" → "found Nu-Clear Sounds delivered"
 * "there was "enough" → "there is "enough"
 * "said the band "are" → "said Ash "are"
 * "the band were "far" → "the band are "far"
 * "said that as the band got older," → "said that as Ash get older,"
 * Remove comma after the UK position and move the UK ref to the end of the sentence too
 * "in Australia,[68] and" → "in Australia and" moving [68] to the end of the sentence
 * Mention the organization that awarded the certification in the UK and how many units this has pushed, plus this should be by the UK/Scotland positions
 * "and number 15 in" → "alongside reaching number 15 in"
 * "and number 31 in" → "while it peaked at number 31 in"
 * The UK singles positions are unsourced

Track listing

 * Pipe "Numbskull" to Numbskull (song)

Personnel

 * Seems disorganized or is this the way it is ordered in the booklet?
 * Per order in the booklet. Yeepsi (talk) 17:16, 26 September 2021 (UTC)

Charts and certifications

 * Good

Final comments and verdict
until everything is fixed; this did not take too long! --K. Peake 16:34, 26 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Made the changes; added two comments above. Yeepsi (talk) 17:16, 26 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, after I did very brief copy editing! --K. Peake 20:23, 26 September 2021 (UTC)